Mortification

Mortification

A Poem by Khal Attero

From the depths of your screams,
I salute you my fellow sinner, 
For this is a place we deserve to be,
Damnation and torture awaits.

A Priest claimed, a minion of God,
But yet so monstrous and evil you are,
Innocence of a child you have taken,
Forever in flames you shall burn .

Prudence did fall, angels did cry,
Slaves of hell shall wander around.
Gates of nether are closed,
For salvation you can only moan,
For eternal is your life in misery.

Prayer is no more a way of escape,
Stupid creation, don't you see?
Ignorance and heresy brought you here,
Your tears will bring no mercy,
For there is no God south of Heaven.

© 2012 Khal Attero


Author's Note

Khal Attero
I may have some grammar issues, so please inform me if you find them.

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I adore your sense of meaning within the context of religion and personal thought! Grammatically I would only make these changes,

From the depths of your screams,
I salute you my fellow sinner,
For this is a place we deserve to be,
Damnation and torture waits.

A Priest claimed, a minion of God,
But yet so monstrous and evil you are,
Innocence of a child you have taken,
Forever in flames you shall burn.

Prudence did fall, angels did cry,
Slaves of hell shall wander around.
Gates of nether are closed,
For salvation you can only moan,
For eternal is your life in misery.

Prayer is no more a way of escape,
Stupid creation, don't you see?
Ignorance and heresy brought you here,
Your tears will bring no mercy,
For there is no God south of Heaven.


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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love it

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good write, though I can't say I agree with the message.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I adore your sense of meaning within the context of religion and personal thought! Grammatically I would only make these changes,

From the depths of your screams,
I salute you my fellow sinner,
For this is a place we deserve to be,
Damnation and torture waits.

A Priest claimed, a minion of God,
But yet so monstrous and evil you are,
Innocence of a child you have taken,
Forever in flames you shall burn.

Prudence did fall, angels did cry,
Slaves of hell shall wander around.
Gates of nether are closed,
For salvation you can only moan,
For eternal is your life in misery.

Prayer is no more a way of escape,
Stupid creation, don't you see?
Ignorance and heresy brought you here,
Your tears will bring no mercy,
For there is no God south of Heaven.


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 19, 2012
Last Updated on May 20, 2012
Tags: Hell, Flames, Heresy, God, Satan, Damnation, Punishment

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Khal Attero
Khal Attero

Croatia



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