"Painting Word Pictures"

            "Painting Word Pictures"

 

With words, I paint pictures in my mind;

Of far away places and long ago times.

Sometimes the pictures are so easy to find,

But often I am stopped, by words that won't rhyme.

 

I think of the stories, I am trying to tell;

They are locked in my mind and continually dwell.

If I had a paint brush...could I paint you one time,

Or are you locked in a yesterday that is no longer mine.

 

I often search for the correct words to say;

Always hoping the rhymes will come...and stay.

For years I did paint, with spectacular hues;

I wish I had painted...a word picture of you.

 

I have always loved words and pastel colors that shine;

Ways to express all that I feel in my mind.

It seems that what ever medium I may choose;

What I am trying to express is... a clear view of you.

 

Just to express...for you...all that I feel...

In words or in colors--for me is so real.

I guess that what...I am trying to say;

By a pen, pencil or paint brush, I love you today.

 

So if you see a painting, or of words that are in rhyme;

I hope you will remember...I really loved you one time.

 

Reviews

[Nirupama.H]

I loved this one!
The flow is so smooth and the lines read very well.As writers, I think, many of us can relate to that feeling when you have an idea but the feeling passes when you sit down to write.
The other eternal conflict is between writing the words you want and the meter, rhythm.
Until recently, I didn't even take meter into consideration but I'm starting to realize what I've been missing out on. A part of me goes, "You need to correct the rhythm" but another goes, " But that word NEEDS to stay! ".
I hope that made sense!

[Valentine]

Yes it does. I just write I never studied poetry writing. Kathie

[Lorry]

You certainly don't show a struggle in this, or any other of your writes for that matter. This comes off as a very clear and fluid thought, capturing the essence of what we all would like to achieve, that memory perfected on a page. Another spooky coincidence that you mention pastel hues, the piece I am trying to write just now is I think, the only thing I have felt the urge to change the colour of the writing to a pastel colour, and now that I have done that, I can't change it back without it looking weird to me. So yes, I get how certain hues can be given to our thoughts at times.
Again, this is so fluid that I'm surprised it has stayed in place on my screen. Beautifully captured Kathie.

[Valentine]

Nemo, there are days that I find myself jotting down lines, other days when I have the time to write, nothing comes. Just go with the flow of words when they are there. Kathie

[Lorry]

Sounds about right to me, or should that be write :)

[KWP]

oh I really love this one V. I like the rhythm and the message in the lullaby of love itself XXX

[Valentine]

Thank you. Some times words just flow as you know from your writing. Other days...blank pages. Kathie

[Neal S]

Great poem with a lovely title. Cool look at how your process works. Nice stuff!

[Valentine]

Thank you Neal. Some days words come easy, other days nothing. Kathie

[D Connolly]

Oh my goodness what a beautiful poem! I am also stopped by words that won't rhyme. "Are you locked in a yesterday that is no longer mine" is a great line. This whole poem is beautiful, it actually made tears come to my eyes

[Valentine]

there is a Comprehensive American Rhyming Dictionary you can get. I have one that someone gave to me. I have rarely even opened it. One might help you. Kathie

[D Connolly]

Oh neat! I'll check it out

[Stanley R. Teater]

I read it twice, the second time I read it aloud. Even better that way. A fine piece of work.

[Valentine]

Thank you Stanley. Kathie

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my ...so sad yet so musical ... you describe the birthplace of artistry ...sometimes one can be almost desperate to find a way to express deep passions, desires, needs ... for one such as you, its not just the rhyming, but rhythm, iambs and syntax .. i have a lot of admiration for anyone who seems to belt these out with such ease ..the few i have attempted take weeks and lots of advice from others .. but are well worth the effort ..the humor of your 1V4L belies the romance and wistful memory of the lost loved one :(( enjoyed reading
E.

[Valentine]

I never studied writing. My mom was a published poet in newspapers etc. She said I inherited her talent. It just was there from a small child. But I like painting much better, Kathie

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .................

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful, beautiful and honest words dear friend.
"So if you see a painting, or of words that are in rhyme;
I hope you will remember...I really loved you one time."
Real love can never leave us and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Valentine]

Thank you John for your kind words. I just love painting and writing, you love writing too, I can see that. Kathie

[Coyote Poetry]

I wish I could paint and you are welcome dear Kathie.

[Paul Bell]

If the picture on the wall is looking divine.
Then it stands to reason.
It's bound to rhyme.

[Valentine]

Paul, not all have to rhyme, I like reading all types of writing. Kathie

[wordman]

you are my creation,the essence of my mind,as i paint,
you in rhyme

[Valentine]

Ron, thank you for taking the time to read my writes. I owe you a dozen or more reviews so get writing. Kathie