Outer Beauty

Outer Beauty

A Poem by Valentine

               Outer Beauty

 

You are like an intricately carved door,

Outer beauty for all of, the eyes to see.

Lovingly polished, like a lustrous wood floor,

But as hard inside...as any wood can be.

 

You stay forever...locked in your shell;

So no one can see... what's inside.

Are you standing behind the doorway to hell;

Is that what you are trying to hide?

 

All of your beauty is on the surface;

For all of the world...to behold.

Your windows are trimmed in curtains of lace,

But...behind the door...you dwell in the cold...

 

Of an empty room...that still becons to me

With nothing of much value...lying within.

Beauty on the outside...behind lock and key;

Willing me...to step inside of that coldness again.

 

Still you stay closed...like a carefully carved door;

Forever locked...so no one can see...within.

Now I am on the outside and the world offers more;

Than that cold room, you locked yourself...away in.

 

Is it love that you fear...in that world where you are;

Locked away in the sad place, that you stay?

Do you know that happiness is really...not that far?

Behind that door do you know...what you threw away?

 

             {P&C}   Valentine


© 2017 Valentine



Author's Note

Valentine
Very old write, idea came from a book I read at the time. Kathie

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For some, the seclusion of the heart is necessary to stave off hurt, and some are just solitary people. Good one, Kathie

Posted 3 Days Ago


Valentine

2 Days Ago

Thoughts from an old novel but kind of reminded me of my dad. Really nice looking but it took a lot .. read more
I can definitely relate. Very introverted individual.

Posted 6 Days Ago


Valentine

6 Days Ago

Or wrapped up in self too much to let others in. Valentine
Chris A Jones

5 Days Ago

I was referring to myself. I'm the very introverted individual. I think we are still talking about.. read more
A penetrating depiction, Valentine/Kathie!
As usual, very well done!!!
Terry

Posted 1 Week Ago


Valentine

1 Week Ago

Terry, ideas for writes can come from many places. I haven't read or done much writing but I notice.. read more
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sometime being disconnected, cold , silent do not mean that it's heart is not beating but may be some poisonous past experience lock the outer shell more firmly..it is truly a beautiful write and specially like the indirect use of metaphor

Posted 1 Week Ago


Valentine

1 Week Ago

Thank you. Kathie
This is something I really needed to read! I feel like this spoke to me on so many different levels. I'm always so locked away, inside myself. Never want to change, but I feel like I really have to step out of my comfort zone. Thank you Kathie

Posted 1 Week Ago


Valentine

1 Week Ago

Thank you for stopping by. Kathie
The are some people who have to hide their insecurity behind a mask of glitter and ostentation.
Beneath that cover may lie a history of repression and bullying , where they fear rejection by those who have good relationships.
Your poem, rich in understandable metaphors and controlled poetic style describes all these factors. Norman

Posted 1 Week Ago


Valentine

1 Week Ago

Thank you Norman, just words in a book that I elaborated on. Many things stimulate writes. Kathie
You love the "ABAB" structure, which your are fantastic at.

I have yet to dive into any preset standards of composing my poems, as of now—or that I was aware of (besides haikus) but as always, this came out nice.

I know you don't like editing after the fact of what has been published but I'd like to see ellipses between: "threw...away" at the ending line.

Seems to add more distance to strengthen the feel of loss.

Wondwrful write; great story-telling, nice structure, as well.

Much love,

LR

Posted 1 Week Ago


Liquified Realities

1 Week Ago

No, many are also written in "AABB" format, but there is nothing to be worried about, if that's your.. read more
Valentine

1 Week Ago

Sorry, I do not even try to write in a certain form, if it turns out that way it is probably because.. read more
Liquified Realities

1 Week Ago

Much love Kathie,

LR
reminds me of actresses,singers,business women
look but don`t touch

Posted 1 Week Ago


Valentine

1 Week Ago

Ron, right from a man's point of view, I was thinking more of a man like my dad on the surface, stro.. read more
i like the door personalizations .. i worked as a carpenter for 15 yrs and can see it plainly .. solid, oak, mahogany stained .. big, thick, no window :( the theme was almost an anthem in the 60's .. i think some of the repetition is not necessary but you drive the point home well .. i think when it is fear of love and connection that locks us inside .. it is the most tragic of lost living ... you always include such sound wisdom in your work Ms. Valentine ..:)
E.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Valentine

1 Week Ago

Thank you for your kind review. Some things just need more emphasis. Kathie

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