Falling For You

26 March 2012

As soon as the first strum hits my ear,

You’re there,

Seemingly swaying along to the music in my memories

We’re in the car,

Accidentally bumping hands

We blush and grin as we turn onto Echols

The guitar echoes the tune our complacency plays

The lyrics are the very thoughts humming inside of our heads

You open the door

The warm, late September air greets us affably

The moment I step outside, we envelope each other,

The radio still playing

We smile to ourselves in excitement

So in sync, so in tune,

Like the harmonies flowing through the speakers

“Oh, I’m falling for you,”

coos the voice as the song closes

“Falling For You, the new one by Colbie Caillat,” announces the DJ

My reminiscent reel has been interrupted

By a change of pace, the next song has begun

Returning to reality,

It is nearly three years later

And I haven’t spoken to you in months

One day, I’ll play this song,

And not think of you.

Maybe.

Author's Note

not my typical style, really seeking feedback on this one.

Reviews

[Arly Parent]

I really like this. A great deal. It's hard to flow well in a prose poem and make the reader care. I think you really did well creating the scene. Your rhythm was great, your word choice was on point and you led the story forward seamlessly to me. I really enjoyed it. It wasn't just some random account or some really rigid story. You told the story and stepped back a bit to weave in emotion and tone. It was really smoothly done to my reading. And the twist at the end was great and poignant and relatable as well as somewhat unexpected. Not to sound too overly complimentary-I just really enjoyed it. It may not be your usual style but this is good. Wish you the best with your writing.

[just is]

I think it reads wonderful,
I like this, alot of wonderful ines in it as well.
Awesome job!

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

Wow this felt like I was sharing your memory! Gah!

[Distant horizons]

Beautifully written. Love the ending. So true how songs are so etched with memories for us all.

[Suditi]

Wow!
The end was so profound.
A beautiful poem. Nice imagery.
It leaves the reader, with questions..wondering the exact story behind! And thats the most amazing part about it.