Where do i go?

Where do i go?

A Poem by Vampire

Where do i go when the one I loved has left me in the dark?

Where do i go when the day has turned into night?

I call him but he cant hear me

I run to him but i never get any closer

He speaks but i cannot hear the voice that once called me into the loving arms that now push me away.

Where do i go when the one i love does not love me anymore?

What am i supposed to do? move on? thats absurd

If i cannot move on then.....

Where do i go?

 

 

© 2009 Vampire


Author's Note

Vampire
I cannot let my love go...................i wish i didnt love him so.............maybe things would be easier if we had never met...............but yet im glad we met...................im so confused.......

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Ooch. Seems like Faraday Strange was pretty blunt in his remarks.
Well, I thought this poem was interesting. I really am not very good at poetry so I respect someone who can write it well.
I did think the middle part is a bit flat in emotions--I'd add something more to 'I call to him but he can't hear me'; how did you call to him? With what emotions?
Perhaps it could be a bit longer also, but all in all it's pretty good.

~S

Posted 15 Years Ago


This seems very, very flat.

I like the starry-eyed feel to it, but thats the only part that seemed to have any feel to it here. The structure seemed awkward, and while I can appreciate the questioning in poetic format, the simple fact that you really didn't take the reader anywhere, made finishing this piece a bit lackluster, and unsatisfying.

Posted 15 Years Ago


This is magical
love it
=]

Posted 15 Years Ago


Things happen for a reason. if it's the past cut it off with all swiftness, no matter how painful, and move on. Ain't easy, but if it was it wouldn't be worth doing.

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Added on February 10, 2009

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