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Leasing White Space

Leasing White Space

A Chapter by Attentive_Ambience

Would you take a dramatic pause -

 

        

Would. you. read. each. word. in.

a. punctuated. fashion?

 

Would you rather scan over -

 

 

The white space, 










Or,

Have it swallow you whole?

Welcome to the poetic’s white space,

It’s also known as the black hole.

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I’ve stood beside the weeping cherry tree

Watching the sun set, it’s last rays stroking the sky in oranges, reds, pinks, purples

The first day of spring: crisp air, newly cut grass, budding flowers

 

With my hand on the tree trunk I cup the tiny blossoms, caressing their feather-light petals

Breathing in: ah, is that the scent of renewal?

Breathing out: oh, the budding of a life born.

 

And then I think, is it time to renew my lease?


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And then I think, maybe I’ve been leasing this life for too -long -




© 2018 Attentive_Ambience



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Hi. I've read all three "chapters", and I'm not totally sure I understand them but I really enjoy your imagery and the way you pose questions and hypotheses for the reader. We have to engage and think. And then your imagery takes us on a journey that slightly resembles marshalling of thoughts about a yet to be solved problem. So, whilst I found it opaque, it had me hooked.

Typo/spelling thing - I think you mean its last rays without the '

The other recollection upon looking again actually goes back to my childhood days of A A Milne and 'When we were very young'. Milne would very often finish a poem by going to one word per line to show the separate contribution each made. I still have a tattered much scribbled-in copy!

Nice work
Nigel

Posted 6 Months Ago


Attentive_Ambience

6 Months Ago

Thank you for pointing that out! I hadn't seen it. I'll be adding more poems to this 'book.' I just .. read more

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