Stay

Show me your darkness, light is easy to love. But if you see it, will you stay?

I'll use all my power

To push you away

What you don't know is,

That I want you stay.

I'll shut the door

Right in your face.

Even I don't know it yet

I want you to stay.

The love you send my way 

I'll throw it all away.

But my heart will scream

I need you to stay.

I'll not admit it

I say it - I'm stubborn.

But you need to hear me out

For that, please stay.

I'll show you my demons

Who'll try to eat you too

But I need to fight them

I need you to stay.

I'll push you away,

I'll shut you out,

I'll scream in your face,

But I need you to stay.

Stay for me,

Stay for me,

I don't say it today

But stay for me.

All I ask,

Is a simple answer,

Tell me, my love,

Will you stay?

Author's Note

Second poem. Tell me what you think. Thanks for reading!!

Reviews

[APOORVA]

I'll use all my power,
To push you away,
AMAZING START MATE

The love you send my way,
I'll throw it all away.
But my heart will scream,
I need you to stay.
WE ALL WANT FOR SOMEONE TO STAY, TO RESCUE US FROM THIS WORLD AND LOVE US LIKE NEVER DONE

I'll push you away,
I'll shut you out,
I'll scream in your face,
But I need you to stay.
SOME PEOPLE AREN'T GOOD IN EXPRESSING THERE LOVE, BUT THEY DO. PEOPLE WHO DON'T SHOW ARE THE PEOPLE HAVING TRUEST FEELINGS


Stay for me,
Stay for me,
I don't say it today,
But stay for me.
AND THIS PORTIONS SHOWS, HOW LOVE IS DONE.
LIKED YOUR WRITE

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you, Apoorva!! Glad this one worked for you!

[G. B. Banks]

that is beautiful and naturally honest, liked

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you so much for your beautiful review!

[Seeker]

This poem perfectly epitomizes the bitter-sweetness with which love can strike. Hard to believe this is only your second piece. Fantastic!

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you so much for your thoughtful words!

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts led to proper ending. Some questions must be asked before allowing the heart to come alive. I liked the ending and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you so much! Yes, I really like my ending too.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.

[Ethan]

Nicely done. I only have a comment on format.

I'll use all my power,
To push you away,
What you don't know is,
That I want you stay.

You put commas at the end of each line, which isn't necessarily bad if the lines need commas, but these don't. By including commas, you render the piece grammatically incorrect. In poetry, when you start new lines, you don't need commas. Other than that technicality, great job :))))

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Oh, I didn't know that! Thank you very much for pointing that out. I'll correct that ASAP. Thanks!

[...]

End is very hopeful. Try change and don't be anymore puppet of own demons. I like structure of this poem from dark intimate light.

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you so much! I really like the ending too!

[ChloeInTheDark]

Loving someone extremely really make one feel very anxious. This is what I felt in your words. They are pleasurably painful. I enjoyed reading your poem!

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you so much, ChloeInTheDark! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

[Michael G. Smith]

This seems like a tragedy of someone who has not learned what love truly is; talking, sharing ones thoughts no matter how scary. Real love puts all the cards on the table and faces the risk of rejection. You you've written an all to common scenerio here.

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Yes, true, but most of us fear the vulnerability sharing brings and the despair rejection brings, I guess that's what makes it a common scenario. Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Love,
Vasilees.

[writ rajat]

Very nice dear love distributor I wish he will stay with you forever

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

It's not about a guy, but thanks for the well wishes.

[Layla Fairchild]

I can feel the emotion pouring out of this poem. It is a sad beautiful tragic poem (my favourite kind) and I think you done a glorious job on it. I must say, I'm very envious. So keep it up and keep it coming!

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you, thank you so much!! Believe me, write what you feel and you can write better poems than this.

[Layla Fairchild]

I'll try one day and if it's good, I'll upload it on here.

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

And I'll make sure I read it.

[Layla Fairchild]

Thanks! :)