I slept with a stranger

I slept with a stranger.

Foreign familiar eyes gazed upon my lips.

Rough stranger hands, clenched my hips.

Heavy iniquity emerged from memory- cloudy, forlorn and... heavy.

Swirling- out of body- until my eyes were too tired to stay open.

I felt myself leave the moment. 

Incomprehensible restlessness taints my soul.

My mind aches... aches to remember.

When?

When did I sleep with a stranger?

Reviews

[alan peter kelly]

I used to sleep with strangers all the time. At first it was fresh, bold, beautiful, new...then it became boring..like way too much of anything. Enjoyed.

[PaintedBirdy]

before i read the reviews i thought this was about rape too. i actually think a lot of us have had some sort of molestation as children, regardless of being male of female. i'm sorry if you have and if you have you're not alone. you're actually a bright star, if you'd stop hiding it. i think you're amazing. please keep writing. a lot of us need hope from seeing others.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice poem. Left reader with the feel of real life or dream? The strong description made the poem take life and understanding. Thank you Veronika for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

This can be interpreted in multiple ways. Bringing my own thoughts and experiences to the table, this reads as if you are with someone who is familiar to you but who has changed with time. "Foreign familiar eyes" ... love this wording. This can also pertain to someone that you are intimately familiar with long distance; but having just met, realize that they are physically a stranger to you. Of course, the third option would be construed as a date rape drug ordeal, but this would be my last choice for this poem.

I also don't feel as if it's sexist or pointing a finger at anyone. It's a question to yourself in reliving some memories, cloudy at best.

If provoking a conversation garners praise, you have it in spades. Each reader will read into it what he will based upon his own experiences. It doesn't make it right or wrong, good or bad, or sexist it any way.

Good job.

[Relic]

What she said. :)

[VeronikaRKL]

Thank you, your words are kind. I'm glad you can interpret so many different things. I'm also glad it doesn't come across as sexist or finger pointing.

[Poetic Beauty]

Wow the last line makes this poem a little shocking. Love each line of this poem. How each line played off the next.

[VeronikaRKL]

I'm glad I did post this, as it was just ramblings in my head. I'm grateful that it's readable and not as choppy as I thought it was. Thank you, I appreciate your words of encouragement.

[Poetic Beauty]

It was well penned. Sometimes we are our worse critics.

[Brittany Zedalis]

I get the other interpretations, but I also can see it as a bad memory of sleeping with someone who you see as a stranger now. Very moving.

~Luna

[VeronikaRKL]

All I want my poetry to do is to move people. To connect with people on struggles that I know are hard to put out there. I'm glad each of you interpreted it in some way. Thank you so very much.

[Relic]

Wow, I'm thinking rape drug. That's a horrible thing to have to go through. Trying to remember would be impossible and a plus for the monster that did it.

Swirling- our of body
Did you mean out of body?

Scary poem.

[VeronikaRKL]

Thank you for finding that typo! I did mean out not our. It's a funny thing to write a poem about something you can't recall.

[WoodenChair]

It's very worrying that you're thinking rape and drug!

What happens if both parties judgements are equally impaired? Of course, the male is still guilty, this is disgusting sexism!!!!

[VeronikaRKL]

I have not said that this is even a true setting. I also said nothing about alcohol or being raped or drugs. Also, Relic never even put a gender to the "Monster" that they found in my poem. My poems aren't about placing blame or even necessarily the setting you think it is. My poems are here for people to relate to something. For there to be something that expresses what they cannot. It worries me that you WoodenChair take my poems so literally and turn them into something argumentative instead of something emotional.

[WoodenChair]

I commented on Relics review, but thank you for again judging someone

[Relic]

It was an interpretation, not sexism.

[WoodenChair]

F*****g Feminists

[Brittany Zedalis]

Wow, dude.

[Relic]

................... :)

[WoodenChair]

Someone has to fight for male rights or else we'll just be milked for semen in the cum and joke mines of mars