The Glass

The source of Never-Ending torture

Robs her breath

                                Blinds her eyes

           Taunts her death

                           Tells her lies.

 

Trapped so delicately

With so many tears

To drown in.

                                (Robs her breath)

Angels sing comfortingly

Yet they can't match

Her pain within.

                                (Blinds her eyes)

Blood flows violently

From the ugly wound

She can't hide.

                                (Taunts her death)

Stories told vividly

By her own words

From voices inside.

                                (Tells her lies)

Author's Note

Honest opinion on rhetoric and content is appreciated.

Reviews

[Arabdha]

beautifully phrased..and very poignant..a dark beauty this one is..good to see you writing again :)

[Charity]

I honestly don't see what you're trying to persuade people to do in this poem...but i like it all the same! the rhyming scheme works well with the topic!

[Rebel Angel]

I love it. It flows so well and reading it is intense. I can feel all the pain and frustration and loss within the poem. It really is a great right. Dark, intense and flowing. Great write.

[Ruth]

Amazing work! The flow is well paced, keeps the reader drawn into an abyss! lol
Stunning and I love it, so claustrophobic and intense
xx

[TheFemininePad]

A very dark and edgy poem. This is a great poem written by you. The structure of the poem is different from what I'm use to, but its different in a very good way. Each line at the beginning of the poem is elaborated on further within the poem. I think you did a good job here.

[Marianne]

Wow...this is so dark, but so wondrously expressed...I feel the pain, the sorrow, the loss...and I relate to those abysmal musings, those emotions that crush the spirit.
I hope you are writing metaphorically here, Kyrie ! I LOVE the title...so very apt and clever :)