Friendship Lost

 

I thought that we were friends,
you always said I was the best.
I was getting used to not having to pretend,
I much preferred you to all the rest.

 

We spent almost all our time laughing,
not once did we ever seriously disagree.
When we weren't together we were forever texting,
though now it seems you have chosen them over me.

 

What was I to you?
Did you think it was a game?
What's funny is that deep down I always knew,
that to you, all I'd be was a name.

 

I was there when you needed someone,
how appropriate that you would use me to better yourself.
This was the last time, with friendships I'm done,
I will write this all away, and leave it upon the shelf.

 

I've lost all hope for having someone there,
from now on, I will remain alone.
Perhaps it will be better this way, to care, HA, I shall not dare!
After all, loneliness has always been a disease to which I am prone.

Reviews

[TadKent]

Melancholy, but still very good. The most beautiful thing anyone can do is be honest about something, and I think you've done it here. One thing I would leave out here is the texting part. Makes it seem juvenile, a tiny bit. Very good though! just say talking or something instead. It's hard to associate anything mature happening when someone says texting. Curse of our generation, haha.

[Kyle Insane]

Wow. they say everythings relative but..wow i wasnt expecting to get kicked in the teeth like this! more! thank you.

[JC]

raw and real.

[Numb]

What wonderful... everything you've used in such a short piece.
I could really feel the emotion jumping out of almost every word, and the rhyme only enforced it so much more.
You have such a unique writing style that I have come to love, and envy. You write with such... elegance and poise that it seems quite professional.
You truly are becoming one of my favorite authors/writers on this site.

~N~

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought this was very emotional and that made it good. I can relate as well because my friend is always a jerk to me. We make up later and then he says things he shouldn't say to me. We get into a big argument, but that is because he likes arguing. He told me that a lot. He is a bad friend, but I keep him around because he needs help. Sometimes he would come to me when there was a problem. I would say that we aren't really friends right now. I doubt we will be friends ever again. He might be nice right now, but he will probably turn on me again. The poem was great because it described a lot of things that happened between me and my friend. We normally just would text though. When he wanted to me meet me I was busy. I was practicing for band so he would just text me. I didn't like him when his girlfriend started something. I had always hated that girl. She now has hurt my sister. I'm just glad that my friend broke up with her. Well thanks for sharing. :)

[f**k you]

ah, I can relate to this so unfortunately well. You've got great emotion in this, and it's brought out in every word. However I'm bot quite sure about the flow, some lines seemed too long and made it a little choppy, but the messege spoke clearly either way, which I really liked. Great write.

-nicole-was-here-

[Jaded rose]

An emotional poem and it is very true. Unfortunately, it does not get easier when you get older. Friendships are hard but remember to always be a good friend and you will find a handful that will be a good friend to you. Don't give up hope for finding special friends. I felt the same way for years. I have a handful of good friends that I will always treasure. You will too.

[The_Tom_Ward_Method.]

ok im seriously crying with evrey word of this beutiful poem you have written. i can relate completley. very very good

[Abdul Aziz]

Sad and simple. I think the simplicity of the poem imparts a kind of reality to it. I wouldn't recommend changing the word "texting", but TadKent is right nonetheless! Very well written poem.

[zappy]

wow this is very good