Like you

from the "no1knowsViolet" collection

 

The music captures me, as I try not to hear it

But the melody consumes me

The keys dance for you, like liquid

Like my body

I close my eyes and watch you

Your creation

Your passion

Like my heart for you

Full

Holding out

I try to remember the pain

It is so strong

You are so strong

Like my mind

But you should know

I feel it undeniably

I love you

Like you

Like Me

Love me

Reviews

[~crazy Beautiful~]

a very nice love poem, emotional and beautiful
nice work
thank you for entering my contest

[Rhonda]

The last few lines make the poem take a nice turn. I also love the first few lines. As if you are captured by something you haven't quite fully heard.


Nice job.

-R

[kyle aka-Osiris]

it was hard to understand the 3rd line but it was a good poem

[Forest Green]

Very sweet poem; I can imagine you lounging beneath a willow tree while writing this.

Keep up the good work.

Forest

[SweetPeachesAlways]

But the melody consumes me - doesn't it, though?

This is so beautiful, it makes me sway a little as I'm reading it....
Very good write!

[forfila]

Lovely Danielle, one must love self to be able to love others, I love it =)


Love,
Me

[Phibby Venable]

aah, i know this longing melody & you have expressed it beautifully, each line
moving so well into the next, I especially like the movement & passion of the last six.
really fine work.