Violent Blue

Stars twinkled bright
on descending twilight
gentle zephyr blew

I dance to you
upon crippled feet

Lips stitched shut
I cannot speak

Forgotten vows
and dead devotions

Do I really need to write
a ballad of the w***e
that kept her legs open

Muscles tense
as common sense
hustles leaving lines
illogical unheard explanations

As I battle my thoughts
and come to grips

Mental terms

Penned concerns

Words strike

Reality burned

Anger is today's mood

I fight too pretty
and I love too ugly

Men are s**t
and girls are icky

Abandoned
damned
to be alone

Cold metal
Beretta

Hidden beneath
loves disguise

My veins
they pulse
and pound
in violent blue

In a flash of lost control

Blood drops
Shattered parts

The deepening
shades of me

At 3 pm the dead hour
we journeyed to our end

Stars twinkled bright
on descending twilight

If thoughts
could yield
verse would end

By Samantha Campbell

Author's Note

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inspired by a dream lol

Reviews

[Little Birdie]

Wow, really incredibly powerful. A hint of resigning here though, something a tired person would write at the end of their quest with no wish to go further...the last verse struck deep especially "If thoughts could yield verse would end" because it just speaks of a higher truth I can actually feel. Great poem.

[Jed]

wow this is powerful and amazing!!!
beauty love hate twisted into perfection
I love it

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

Very interesting, and it sounds more like inspired by a nightmare! I felt like I was reading something by Jim Morrison as I read. Thanks for sharing :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad and powerful poem. I taught my daughters they were special and never to allow anyone to hurt them. In my lifetime. I met many woman who lost control and became meaningless. I try to help. Sometime need to dance in hell to see the truth. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[paradise]

It has a very dark feel to it which I enjoyed because many people can write these words but you made it flow great and brought it together making em want to read even more. The laststanza very very emotional for me I couldn'y tell you why, but it it was flawless at the very end great write once again.

[Sourav]

Inspired by a dream? Well, I must say it was a very fruitful dream that made you write a poem like this! I love the intensity of the poem. It's dark, emotional... and lovely! :)

[WhiteWillow]

Wow, super intense! Quite the scarlet picture you paint. Love the brush you use.

[Arabdha]

sheer brilliance-love the brevity with which you portray so much ..just with the hues of a color ! Keep writing :)

[Margarette]

A poem full of thrills and strong emotions flowing within each line
The title captured my attention full and I must say you did a great job illustrating it in your poem. Sometimes, life can become so horrible to a selected people but believe me, that's what there is to life isn't it? And that's also what makes us a human beings

[Rea]

for a dark poetry it is absolutely brilliant, very well written. I particularly loved the way you closed it and the way you gave life to emotions such as aggression and frustration, absolutely brilliant