My verse "His voice is like a heart beat booming full bass thru my open chest" was inspired by a song "Sail" By AWOLNATION and the rest of the poem grew from that ... and that thought gave me the idea for the garden, growing theme
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Wow. What can I even say? This was intensely beautiful. I can only come up with two revisions to make. In the second line, remove one of the "t"s in hot. Then a little farther down, put an apostrophe at the end of "speakin'".
Your so f*****g good at this arousal paper pen thing, makes fifty shades of grey seem dimmer, the way you sprawl your self on the page, like a sacrifice for the lack of desire masses tickler , which move in wet whispers
just to see your sexuality flicker...amazing stuff
Posted 10 Months Ago
10 Months Ago
You have me smiling from ear to ear lol I was just talking to a friend about that book ... shes gonn.. read moreYou have me smiling from ear to ear lol I was just talking to a friend about that book ... shes gonna loan me her copy. I have to say your one of my fave reviewers :)~
I am always grabbed by the combination of lust and desire and fertile imagery and words that bursts out of your brain, like a climactic spurt. You convey too the frustration and longing of the virgin whose feeling respond to the heat by an unquenchable inner heat, relieved only by the fingers that caress the spot - and by the words that come like a erection's explosion.
I love that song! Always nice to know what inspired a poem. Very interesting structure--it works, like holding a blob of silly putty and letting it slowly stretch out. Very personally sensuous.
The words are very nice. I have never been able to get behind a piece of poetry that can't be relayed verbally (with a rare exception). I understand it and I accept it, I just don't care for it, maybe someday that will change.
you also have a typo or two
Posted 10 Months Ago
10 Months Ago
what typos lol ... I may have done them on purpose
10 Months Ago
"I ravage threw pages" is that one that stands out to me.
my new book
http://www.amazon.com/Hearts-Collaboration-Samantha-Campbell/dp/1484918185/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1368231364&sr=8-1&keywords=Hearts+Collaboration
you should buy a copy lol
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