rap song (Im So F****n FEROCIOUS) work N progress

my first attempt at a rap song ... NOT DONE!!!

Star studded flesh
So damn fresh

lips drippin'
spittin' verbs

Silent (Hush)

And you like how I
put a pause in my
flow like
Rrrah

Lock in on this
Top notch
hot drop
spittin
stupid def
melodies
pugilistic
linguistical

I exclaimed
emphatically I'm artist
B***h! I'm poetic!!!!!!

The spirit's in the lyric

erotic, exotic
hypnotic, robotic
melodic

Bodacious Bot
Leviathan Lady

Yes I am whale a*s
and I wrestle hoes with my fins

Im lyrically liquefied
erotically justified

Amplify
the alcohol volume
when I spit

tick tock
hip hop
Remix

a swerve into
verb insanity

Vivacious
vixen in-Viting
vessels to get Filled
voluptuously concave caves
waiting to be filled

Leaving limp losers
lame lacking luster

I exclaimed
emphatically I'm artist
B***h! I'm poetic!!!!!!

The beat that I'm bangin is delicious
yeah you can eat this

Can you hear my feisty
feline flirting
following you
like cum pet me

I spit -sea-men flow

Lick that beat

Im lollipop
got them all
on the lick

Do you taste
that beat

I blaze synapsis

smoldering infernos
see I make it hot

call me an erotic arsonist
lightning bolts to the mic
burnin up the stage

Firing fatal flames
to fakes for falsified fame
I feast on the feeble-minded
the force of my femininity
fucked up your focus
cause im so
f****n
FEROCIOUS

I got a P.H.D

Poetic
harmonic
Diva

I'm honored honestly
like honors musicology
fe-fi-fofology
F**k ya

I exclaimed
emphatically I'm artist
B***h! I'm poetic!!!!!!

Im Versatile Vogue

When I put this mic down
the speakers will explode

So you know
that this N I to the
C K I is the f*****g illest
Ha

By Samantha Campbell

Reviews

[Sethnicity]

Sick! I feel ya.
keep going for the jugular.
when you write raps sometimes it helps to use "/"
to indicate rhyme breaks for the reader.

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well. Writing the words down is the easy part. Saying the words with strength and meaning in public is where you show if you understand the rap and feel of the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Jed]

freaking awesome cant wait till its fin

[A Lost Man Found]

much attitude! i like it. if you enjoy this style, please read my work titled "flatline"

[Amelie]

Helluva spunk in here!you got it girl, you might find yourself a record deal ;)

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

lol thanks everyone I will finish it ... Ima work on it now

[kingblaq]

B***h! You are poetic n gud!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

your on to a winner here, work, work, work!

[Lauren Alaska]

I really like it, its very good! I'm looking forward to reading the rest once its finished!(:

[TawnyBlueStar]

nice start :D I'm sure it'll be great once it's finished ^^