War

It is about my feelings about wars in general.

War

New leaves turn over, new flowers bloom

Birds sing happily every spring season

Man, on the other hand runs towards his doom

Warring for land and money, killing without reason

Looting, pillaging, encroaching after invading

With no concern or care for others

Impossible it has become to be kind and loving

To care for each other just like brothers

Plants and animals on the other hand

Live in harmony and peace

Not fighting for money and land

Just ask those monkeys and trees!

War is not good, war is not evil

Young men go for glory and for pride

Little do they know what it feels like to kill

By the time it ends, a lot of people would've died

Violence, hatred and rage everywhere 

Followed by fear, angst and pain

Slowly a kind gaze turns into a hard glare

As the soil is dyed red down to every grain

New leaves turn over, new flowers bloom

Lessons are learnt, as lives were cast

As the sun rises, over the war's tomb

With hope that people learn not to war at last.

Author's Note

This is not very polished and I put it down as a raw aspect of my feelings towards war.

Reviews

[Lola Nad]

War is one of the main problem of Humanity. it's not polished, so it makes sense (at least to me) that pieces about it won't be very polished either. I think a lot of people will agree with the feeling you write down here, no matter how raw they are. It's a very understandable and easy to grasp so well done for that.
The one thing that I have a problem with is with this: "Plants and animals on the other hand Live in harmony and peace" ... I disagree. On two things.
The first thing is that humans ARE animals. Though I admit that for most people, there's a difference. So let's say that disagreement is purely because i disagree with that common view.
The second thing is that it's incorrect. You can see "wars" going on everywhere in the nature be it "animal" vs :animal", plants vs plants or even "animal" vs plants. The only difference is that humans do t on a MASSIVE scale (unfortunately)

[Tiffany K Charles]

I love raw emotions......... So don't doubt the process lovey....

[Jacob Clifford]

I remember not if I have read something of yours yet, Sage. I apologize if I have not; it is long overdue.

As for my thoughts.... Doodley practically took the words from my mouth and said them better than I could have. I'm very glad not everyone is too afraid to speak out about issues such as this one. Once in the mindset, it's very easy to forget just what war really is, and how it contrasts and destroys the beauty in life, as you showed in the first stanza.

[DeadSoulx_x]

I agree. Humans can be so horrible. Not all but sadly most are. I honestly never saw the reason for war. Why kill someone just because they have different views than yourself. People don't agree with the death sentence when it comes to people in jail like murderers but they are perfectly okay with killing numerous people in different nations. Very powerful. I really enjoyed it. Honestly speaking I have enjoyed all of your writings I have read so far.

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An interesting piece.

The writer's views on war and its effects on man and the Earth.
As the most civilised, developed species on the planet you would expect us to know better, than to continually repeat our mistakes from the past, over and over again. As long as there are men and governments, and an "us versus them" mentality, then unfortunately war will always be inevitable.
A very thoughtful poem, Sage. A personal view of an existing problem.

[Sage]

Yes! Finally someone else who got the drift of the message! I'm happy you liked it :)

[Amber Lily]

It's so true... human rarely stop to enjoy the beauty of the world anymore. We're too caught up in our little world of drama. This really brings a lot of issues to light for all of humanity. Well done :)

[Chartheteacher]

Could not agree with the feeling of this poem more. It's so sad that people only see the effects of war when it ends and they turn and see the destruction they have left behind.

[Brad P]

I enjoyed this. The only thing that stuck out to me-- and I understand what you were trying to convey-- is the fact that animals, too, fight over land and territory, including the monkeys. Still, I really did enjoy and feel very much the same way about war.

[BThomvanWart]

I think it's a good, decent write. The only thing I would change is the contraction "would've" to "would have" only because it throws off the flow a little bit. Otherwise, this is a good read.

[Nigel Newman]

I like the coupling of nature and the seasons with the horror of war, death, soldiers, etc. I especially like the way the final stanza comes back to the same start point, just like the circle of nature. And I have to hope that indeed we are somehow learning, though far too often that feels not to be the case.