I Love You

I Love You

A Poem by Ian Faraway

These words so innocent
But you use them in resentment
I can feel the poison of each word
Struggling to breathe them as if strangled by cord
These words have been taught for you to use
But each time you say this phrase, it's being abused
You and you alone
Have made these words hateful down to the bone
Shall I let this crime go on?
Illegally playing 'love' as if its a con
Do not use love's name in vain
For when you do, God cries rain

Please, please don't lie to me
For my heart, you've lost the key
Though thrown away than lost
Is this my cost?
A broken heart and me standing here
Saying 'I love you' and no one else there
Nothing but darkness echoes through and through
I love you
I love you
I love you
As god's tears rain down on me
I look down and cry too, reluctantly

© 2010 Ian Faraway


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perfection of error less, nicely done(I'm just making up words now.) As for your poem I like it. It was amazing and creative and I like the lines with "Do not use love's name in vain, For when you do, God cries rain," and "As God's tears rain down on me, I look down and cry too, reluctantly." It was was creative how you made "I love you" seem like an echo too. You whole poem well written and rhymed in so many places. Well done and keep up the excellent work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Very good, I love the idea behind it. And the ending works out great. Awesome.

Posted 8 Years Ago


A very beautiful poem, and emotionally touching, i liked the finally fading of fonts in its size and it adds more power to the poem...

Posted 8 Years Ago


This was great. There were some really intense emotions in the poem and I was drawn to it. I really liked the rhyme. I think it made the poem stronger. I really enjoyed it. :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


I've read a few of your poems, I like your style! :D This one, even though it seems someone has broken your heart, it's still a wonderful poem. Your words speak of character and honesty. Thanks for the read, and keep up the writing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


WOW. thats all i can say. its so amazing it literally took my breath away! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Ian Faraway

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