Bank Leaves Left River

the fewtch

You there!
Stop building!

The material we
were given to work
with is glistening with madness.

It's going to take years
for anything resembling
a structure to exist here,
but for this they take what
we need to eat 'dogs?

There is less because
we take too long to build!

THERE IS LESS BECAUSE WE TAKE TOO LONG TO BUILD!?

(sound of horses stamping, water lapping, typing and gaffling)

The reason nobody has
built anything is that
the material is insane.

Oven light.

Reviews

[faryn wolff]

there is a quality to your writing that i think challenges or directs the awareness of the reade and tries to take it to a different field of understanding, even if that understanding might be subtle or subconscious, i see that the movement you put into your poetry is not lost on others. i don't think it is just me, i get that impression from reading what others have reviewed.

as always, incredible.

[Moonie]

Is 'oven light' a metaphor for that kind of insane material, since it can't be felt or touched by us, but still can bake cakes, roast things??

[The Twin Arenas]

yeah, basically. I like the power and kind of, really, uselessness of the word. It's a powerful, meaningless thing. It's also an enlightening word. "Oven" to me, makes me think of very dark things. Obviously, "light" does not. I wanted the poem to end in terror and futility, but with light as well. Oven light.

[Cory Barrett]

yep, this is your break through piece, keep storming the castle

[Rita L. Sev]

Building a society on lies and prejudices, or half-truths and obstinacy... yes, that's insane, and takes forever to build on such weak foundations... This is where your words took me, WS.

[The Twin Arenas]

you nailed it.

[Baby Ricochet]

Can't build a decent bridge with Bi Polar Rebar

[Laura Lynn]

This poem is very mysterious to the common eye. I have no idea what it is about except surely there had been some indiscretion in terms of building materials, etc. but in other towns, not this one. The people of this land seem respectfully mindful of conservation. There could be a hidden meaning for an inside audience, that the common reader would not be aware of or able to figure out.

[The Twin Arenas]

tower of babel, france, ovens, atheism, the fewtch, hot dogs. the light in the oven, blood, workers, etc...
thanks for the read, Laura.

[Rene Salinas]

Right tool for the right job! The teacher at Uni. Went on and one it had nothing to do with actualy building as in physical but she still used it. It got so bad we could begin to anticipate the moment when the expression would be used. Organic processes do not depend on synthetic materials but we have forgotten how to build something that would enoble the image of Men. How do we build now? Well at the moment we seem intent in not building. Waconda is telling me that the dynamics of building have lost its sanity. Well destruction seems furnace vaporous and it still doesn't manage to reach the sane.

Thank you

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

We take to much and give so little back. Very well done, Waconda. :) Rudi

[MoriartyMesa]

These are the words, and feelings of any man who earns his corn by his sweat, the bosses wanna cut one corner that leads to three. and Here is this workin man sayin, "How" I liked this cause it reminds all of us of want vs need.

[The Twin Arenas]

thanks, man. thanks for checkin' in.

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

These lines spoke to me
The material we
were given to work
with is glistening with madness... Vivid hues made this an excellent read