Tennessee Slip

the fewtch

Whip your rolls

at the father

of the bride!

At the right time!

At the right time?

At the right time you f****n' whip it at the dad

Cherie has been

married eighty x

like custard

her dress

Throw it when he says

about the gravy

Dad puts on

his WW2 helmet

and buns pluff

off his sad

cotton face,

pet pet off

his war hat

Inside Cherie

      jokes

Gathered round his

table telling stories

about the war

old soldiers passing

the hat mumbling

about crying and dying

sniff sniff spark sniff sparkle

Upstairs Cherie moaning

like a battlefield

Take me south

and into the wilderness

(gasp)

Reviews

[Cory Barrett]

Here i am with the broad upstairs who has taken so many soldiers down this road before. At the end all i can hope for is to be the b***h head in the lobby telling his story to those who will listen. and hoping the salad i'm with gets tossed by another pair of army gloves.

[simonedavlin]

very physical and staccato, much enjoyed due to the fascination it drew from me--not just of understanding the the rhythm and description but also as to the meaning! Probably will be puzzled on this one for a bit but I don't mind that too much.

I love how this all seemed like a tradition of sorts (the storytelling and movement inside and upstairs and eighty x) that is connected to weddings because it is but also completely an creation of the speaker.

[Luna Zerimar]

Your poems always give me something to think about. Which is a good thing.

It sweeps the cobwebs that are inside my head, or brain specifically.

It's just so different. But good.

I like the imagery, and I like the part of the man telling his stories.

Gets to me.

Good read. x

[Cindy Marietta]

Your writing is so unique, I enjoy reading it every time I do. Takes some time to process what you were saying, so different and refreshing than most. Great as always :D

[Falling Leaf.]

Last line packs a punch. Well done

[Cheyenne Williams]

I like the use of Cherie as a proper name. It definitely sounds like something us Tennessee hicks would name a baby girl. I dig this. And you always have the best imagery in your poems.

[The Twin Arenas]

thanks, man. I kind of like it, too.
Cherie such a good name. Almost used Cherise.

[Cheyenne Williams]

I read that as Cheshire. Ha. But I like Cheri better. Glad ya stuck with it

[The Twin Arenas]

Whatabout Cerise?

[Cheyenne Williams]

Like the cherries, right? I'd say it fits the southern naming bill.

[The Twin Arenas]

yeah, like the cherries.