Fishing Village

Fishing Village

A Poem by Waconda Springs
"

the fewtch

"
lime wet air
wet hair
skin wet sides
of fingers
wet sides
he uses the cabbie's stink-um

look at the partner

dumb dough
eyes answer

he didn't do it
any of what
she asked
but look

look at the partner

strawed on lips
stink sweet blue

slap him dreaming
inside shorelines
and he'll find something


© 2016 Waconda Springs



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I'm drifting along with this one, I'm going to re-read but these words are so inspiring and intriguing I truly love it.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Waconda Springs

2 Years Ago

Thanks, Sophie. Appreciate the read.
can't quite decipher
but oh! how
the flow, of words,
perfectly conceived,
bears ripe fruit!
A treat!
Alan




Posted 2 Years Ago


Waconda Springs

2 Years Ago

Thanks, Alan. It's about fishing.
powerful description, and nice flow

Posted 2 Years Ago


I like that way the words flow easily as one reads them, the tempo is great. Nice job!

Posted 2 Years Ago


I really like the jargon in this - creates some interesting/cool phrasing, like "slap him dreaming" "stink sweet blue" "the cabby's stink-um" ...

The poem makes for an entertaining motion picture of story. Thanks for sharing - really nice stuff!

Posted 2 Years Ago


This is quite thought provoking...some things are not recognised at times...really clever piece :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Nice flow. The tempo matches the subject.. its slow and thoughtful, just the way i feel while fishing. The first lines are my favorite. You chose the ending well.

Posted 2 Years Ago


This is very smart and sounds like a classic. Enjoyed reading this piece.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Thanks for the wake up call here.

Posted 2 Years Ago


fishing for love, being dumbstruck, finding something while he gets wet with wistfulness because she's taken the bait and run...now he is in a different cove, dreaming again.

Posted 2 Years Ago



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Waconda Springs
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Edmonton, Canada



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