Unbreakable love

I'm just getting back into writing again so I apologize for anything that may not make sense to you. This is about the love of my life and our love.

He has eyes like the ocean,
A smile like a beautiful ray of sunshine.
The body of a sexy God,
The way he laughs you can hear his sweet, joyful laughter from a mile away.

Heart like fall leaves fluttering to escape my chest,
The bright colors , circulating in my burning vaines,
and all returnes when he lays his lips upon mine.
Two hearts beating as one,

Sharing one soul, deep within.
Everything we feel is real,but to some everything isn’t.
Some have true love and some don't.
Love and loveless beating of hearts,

at any moment my hand can touch his heart and I can feel the beat within his chest,
He who have made a whole heart from broken pieces,
He who have helped create the unbreakable love in us.

Author's Note

What do you think? Please leave suggestions and anything else you think would be great. I'm up for anything you have to say and/or offer. I want to give this to him soon so please tell me if it's good.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Such lovely feelings in your poem, truly sincere and your darling really should be thrilled to have such a wonderful gift from you.

Sent you a message with a few minor thoughts,
BUT please ignore if you want. Your words are just that, YOURS. Just made suggestions cos you' asked for some but only do such a thing privately.

[Desiree O'Neal]

It made sense to me, this was really sweet

[Einstein Noodle]

honest and true expression...and that stands out ...some editing: veins not "vaines" ; and in closing 2 lines: He who has; instead of "He who have" ...i only mention because you asked ;) i think you two are fortunate to share a very real love together ...peace and joy always
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[Rye]

I really enjoyed this poem, it is very beautiful

[wordman]

beautiful poem of love,i enjoyed it

[Karen Redburn]

Awe this is so sweet. I like the testament to love in this poem it is always a great subject. Wonderful job, cheers!

[Wannabewriter16]

Thank you so much! I'm trying to decide if I want to send this to him.

[Karen Redburn]

Only a decision you can make, my friend. If you think it will be well received go for it! Anyone should feel honored to have another writing about them. Best of luck!