The Moment

a little bit about my day to day

I feel like writing a poem, that comes from deep inside

But really I hate poetry, coming from my manly side.

I want to go play a basketball

But then again that’s hard work,

I gotta change my clothes and fight fatigue

But then be strong cause really it’s what I need.

I need to get better,

I need a change of weather,

I need someone close to me so we can be together.

But who knows what I want or what I really need

Cause I’m fake to myself and I make my brain bleed.

Not a choice but a handicap,

The other kids are playing soccer but you better just take a lap.

And I’m cool with that and I’m cool to leave,

But when I look in the mirror, I can feel disappointment in everything I see.

I hate what I see

And I hate who I am,

The way I was raised I’m giving all that I can?

I’m full of excuses making me what kind of a man?

I don’t even know who I’ll turn out to be,

But really I can’t even tell the day of the week.

So ill just forget it and live in today

But I better frame it, cause it’s the only place this moment will stay.

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

Some great lines in this! These words show the human condition of knowing yourself in some ways and in others, wondering who you'll become. That second line shows the pressure that a young man can feel from peers, though calling it rap will get you off the hook these days. "Cause I'm fake to myself and I make my brain bleed"-With all the masks humans wear, we are all guilty of this, forgetting to take off the masks for even ourselves, but I love the way you express it.

[Ashley]

i understand. I love your poem ^.^ can't wait to read more ^.^

[Sirius King]

relate-able write,,,i look forward to reading more

[J. Hampton]

nice flow...like it is

[Rita L. Sev]

Don't be afraid to embrace the "manly side" AND the poet in yourself! Very good, honest and from the gut. Nice job!

[briny broad]

I thought this was really good and very relatable. I actually bookmarked it so I could read it again later.

[Emily Feret]

I need to get better,

I need a change of weather,

I need someone close to me so we can be together.


I really loved this part!

[the crying cup]

This is a great poem, Weedies! Bravo!

[The Don]

If your interested ill be posting another soon. but thanks for the comment!

[the crying cup]

your welcome :3