Rhubarb and Strawberries

Rhubarb and Strawberries

A Poem by YouoweYoupay
"

I learned by watching you...

"

 

 

 

Rhubarb and Strawberries

 

 

Your little flip-flops

Have left a trail

Of mud stamps and

Dried golden Thyme Leaves

 

Mama won't be pleased...

 

But beneath a cream smeared blue

A drizzle spurts

From a thumb-pressed garden hose

 

Your laughter puts me at ease…

 

I rumple your hair

Despite the objections

Dewdrops in sunshine dust

And your sister's lazy humming

All joyful little flecks that kiss

The afternoon breeze

 

You never

Aimed to lecture

But I learned by watching you

Lean to draw pencil lines

 

There was still plenty of earth

To bury rhubarb and strawberry seeds..


© 2013 YouoweYoupay



Author's Note

YouoweYoupay
*Title: To Be Strawberry
*by =WishmasterAlchemist
*Link: http://wishmasteralchemist.deviantart.com/art/To-be-Strawberry-120547985

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Aww. I love this. I just love it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


YouoweYoupay

4 Years Ago

Strawberries love you too! Thanks for stopping by.
Ah a nice look back onto the childhood days at the garden with your mom and sister. At least that's what I took from this poem it made me smile and feel all sorts of nostalgia. The flow of this piece is great it really works and had me really feeling the pulse.

I love the way you told this from two different points of view. Starting out with the daughter, giving one stanza to the mother and then concluding with the daughter again. It makes it a little jumpy and confusing upon a first reading but you really understand it the second time through. You have an amazing talent for imagery. Great job!

Posted 4 Years Ago


YouoweYoupay

4 Years Ago

Thank you, sweetheart! I'm glad I made you smile! :-)
very nicely penned,,it shows how much talented poet you are..

Posted 4 Years Ago


YouoweYoupay

4 Years Ago

Thank you tons. Your beautiful comments encourage me to write. : )
khalid

4 Years Ago

having such a talent, you would never stop writing..
This was really beautiful, and it reminded me of summer which I needed :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


YouoweYoupay

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Infinite, beautiful poems are for beautiful people. : ) Glad you remembered your favourit.. read more
Delightful write, stay positive.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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YouoweYoupay

4 Years Ago

I love you.
Your words just ricotche off the page and straight into the soul (if that makes any sense). I can see things so vividly that it's almost as if I'm the one who's speaking. It leaves such a warm and tender mark on your reader that they are sure to come back and read this over and over again. I know for sure I will.

I always enjoy your work Wella. Keep it up :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


YouoweYoupay

4 Years Ago

KODA SWEETHEART!! How are you?? I'm so happy my words left a warm sensation in your heart. This is w.. read more
-cradle therapy-

4 Years Ago

I'm doing pretty good, thank you so much for asking! :) And your words always do that, your work is .. read more
This is a beautiful poem, filled with peace and nostalgia. Sweet memories of summer days, watching a child go outside and enjoy the world and all its wonders.
Well done! ^^

Posted 4 Years Ago


YouoweYoupay

4 Years Ago

Thank you, darling. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for stopping by. : )
Bluefire

4 Years Ago

Twas no problem ^^
Bluefire

4 Years Ago

Twas no problem ^^
I like it. My mom use to make rhubarb and strawberry pies :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


YouoweYoupay

4 Years Ago

Really?? Must have been what pulled you in. I'd LOVE to try Rhubarb and strawberry crumble someday. .. read more
Photo and words took me to good places. I like the gentle story in the poem. I like the ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


YouoweYoupay

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Coyote. I'm glad you passed by. : )

-youoweyoupay
great imagery and a soothing feeling after reading!

Posted 4 Years Ago


YouoweYoupay

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad my poem made you feel calm. : )

-youoweyoupay

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Added on February 11, 2013
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Tags: poem, story, writing, garden, strawberries, fruit, sunshine, spring, hope, beauty, sadness, memory, lessons, love, believing, faith, family, friendship

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