Fallen

Fallen

A Poem by WhiteWillow
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A soldier's last moments

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Darkness bleeds over my valley of sleep
Swallowing glimpses of lackluster light,
Wasting my soul against purpose I keep;
Dawn's broken promise yields prison of night.

Nightmares haunt recitent hearts until black;
Eloquent dreams of love's past did reside,
Dying my death with me, not coming back.
Brilliance, return to me, burning inside.

Lovelorn proclivity ending its reign,
Memories fallen like ash from the sky
Shouded this mortal's hope, easing the pain,
Dimming my fire without asking why.

Sun pierces clouds over battlefields stained,
Shines down on transients here to remain.


© 2015 WhiteWillow



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The poem is amazing.
"Lovelorn proclivity ending its reign,
Memories fallen like ash from the sky
Shouded this mortal's hope, easing the pain,
Dimming my fire without asking why."
The words are solid. I could write complete poetry and story from your strong description. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Beautiful imagery - you set quite the haunting scene with your words!

Posted 2 Years Ago


beautifully expressed and extremely heart touching. good job

Posted 2 Years Ago


What a beautiful expression of so grim a moment as the last light of life leaving a fallen soldier. "Darkness bleeds over my valley of sleep..." Memories fallen like ash from the sky..." are images of the slow unreality that must present itself to the dying. Wonderful words... a contemplative tribute to a soldiers sacrifice... nicely done!

Posted 2 Years Ago


A great soldier that serves his country and others is succumbing to the reign of fate and death. Those stained battlefields are becoming landmarks of the future remains...Bravo...

Posted 2 Years Ago


WhiteWillow

2 Years Ago

Thank you Sami for your generous review, much appreciated
Sami Khalil

2 Years Ago

Much welcome...:).........................

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