I'd Rather Die Than To Live A Lie

Inspired by the amazing Lady Gaga's song You And I <3

Speed it up, heating up

This spicy kinda driven love

Masochist, hypocrites

The idiots you all love to 

Get in bed with

Sweatin' bullets an' you know it

Cigarettes you smokin'

Askin' the sky expectin' it

To cry and wash away their disguise

Truth ain't what you really seek 

When you're stuck inbetween his filthy sheets

Don't forget to blink when

You're screamin' from the healin'

Of a heart beyond broken

Don't drown away your taste

Because you found another pretty face

To pretend for few days

Ain't again a waste

You're gonna burn until you learn

Last chance to earn a true romance

Somethin' about this age we live in

If you could thicken up that scarred young skin

What would happen to your world then

To the memories you're left to swim in

Smell of summer's hazy green

Breathing out how you found out 

What it's like to be seen

And now it's time to 

Rise up, wise up, shake hands 

With the King

He'll tell you what I mean

Cause I ain't here just to sing

Dying is the only way

To even hope to be freed

From those obscene, teen, sex machines

Reviews

[Caitlin Lea]

This is amazing. The lines flow so well. I am amazed at your ability to seemingly effortlessly weave these ideas together in such a powerful way.

Maybe watch for some phrases that are a little cliche like "sweatin bullets". I get the idea, but maybe there is a different way you can say that.

Very good...again, I love the variation of syllables and length in the lines, and the transitions in your rhyme scheme. Quite good.

[paradise]

NIce i see the reference with lady gagas song

[Trish D.]

A modern way of describing age-old truths. I found myself almost rapping this. Thanks.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Wonderfully penned, almost lyrical write. Nicely done!

~anna rose

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. So many lines stood out in the poem. Frustrations and questions are many in the poem.
"Don't forget to blink when
You're screamin' from the healin'
Of a heart beyond broken"
I like the strong ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Raven Starhawk]

The imagery here sets me off on a journey that I can honestly say arouses my senses. You did a wonderful job penning this.

[angelink]

This is a nice poem with a great point. There will always be those casanovas that tempt you and are hard to resist even though you most likely know how bad they are for you deep down.

[Jeremy Baker]

This has a similar musical quality and sensibility to it, but with a even better message, I think. Well written!