Fallen from Grace

Fallen from Grace

A Poem by Will
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A story of heartbreak and the journey back from heartbreak

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I'm as high as a mountain,
My love is ever-flowing

Your hair: 'tis like a whirlwind,
And your voice a lovely bell

Your mind as quick as a whip;
And your heart made of sheer gold

My mind: a love-filled mine field,
My heart: a confused mess

In naïvety I asked,
My senses merely a blur

Your answer: "We'll talk later,"
By itself, a death blow

Later came, and my sense broke,
You say "Let's just be good friends"

Yes: heart broken, mind shattered,
Yet hope: it still remained

I failed, and then tried again,
Desperation on display

Now on display: a failure,
Once a friend, I'm now despised

But I asked you as a boy,
And I walked away a man

So thank you for the good times,
As i forget all the bad

Although I've fallen from grace,
From you, Grace, I also rise.

© 2013 Will


Author's Note

Will
The first thing I ever wrote. Be honest, but go easy on this one

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Ahhhhhh it's so beautifulllll! I love this... And ever since Grace, you've seem to have fallen further and further for others.. That's the secret meaning i found in this after you told me the story behind it :P

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow! I had goosebumps reading this! Especially the last few lines!
'Although I've fallen from grace,
From you, Grace, I also rise.'

Poetry should evoke emotion in the reader and this does exactly that! So well done! :)



Posted 11 Years Ago


Will

11 Years Ago

I try to put as much emotion into it as possible, so I'm glad you found it. Thanks for reading!
I could relate to these lines -"Your answer: "We'll talk later,"
By itself, a death blow ".
My favorite is - "But I asked you as a boy,
And I walked away a man ".
And last but not the least. The closing is wonderful too - "Although I've fallen from grace,
From you, Grace, I also rise".

Posted 11 Years Ago


Will

11 Years Ago

The closing is my favorite line. It just encapsulates my entire emotional state at the moment perfec.. read more
Mary Christabel George

11 Years Ago

:)
The piece speaks the heart so honestly.
Love it.
Appreciate the clean appearance of it too.

Posted 11 Years Ago


'Your answer: "We'll talk later,"
By itself, a death blow'

My favorite line from the whole poem. For the first thing you've written, this is really nice! :3

Posted 11 Years Ago


Will

11 Years Ago

This one is entirely true; everything in this piece actually happened, so it was easy to write for m.. read more

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Added on February 4, 2013
Last Updated on February 4, 2013
Tags: Grace, love, heartbreak, redemption

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Will
Will

Brooklyn, NY



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