Make Words Speak

I write all these poems with meter and rhyme.
Now, when it counts, no words come in time.

I wanna tell her just how I feel.
I just wanna tell her that these feelings are real.

I can't take it now, these words in my head,
when I try to say them, they fall down dead.

So I'll keep fighting to make these words speak,
and maybe, one day, I won't be so meek.

Reviews

[richom]

You express your feelings clearly with excellent rhyme and meter. I like your use of wanna instead of want to. It gives natural authenticity in that you are writing as you probably speak. Well done.

[Will]

I doc that every now and then to give the piece a more organic feeling to it. I'm glad you appreciated it

[Will]

I do that every now and then to give the piece a more organic feeling to it. I'm glad you appreciated it

[Frieda P]

We're so afraid of rejection, it limits us in our capabilities to communicate verbally. Your poetry says it all, sometimes we just need to take that chance and bare our soul. Nicely pen'd.

[Will]

I definitely now that feeling....thanks for reading, Frieda

[Rita L. Sev]

Even the poet struggles with words of affection spoken aloud... Just give her this poem, and it will say all that you need...
Great expression here, Will.

[Will]

That's not a bad idea.... Thanks Rita.

[Baby Ricochet]

You are the shy type. I'm an introvert by nature, but I'm not shy. Good rhymes.

[Will]

I'm only like that when it comes to girls. I can have hours of conversations with strangers, but when it comes to telling girls how I feel, my tongue decides to knot itself up. Thanks for reading.