Oceanic Dreams

For so long I've been lost in my personal life that I lost touch with my love of writing. I aim to find that again.

Donning the colours of the sky,

Imitating the twinkling of stars,

Softly lapping at our restful toes,

Lulling us into false peace,

 

The first of many, a brilliant cool,

Hiding that of which we may fear,

Only to show us when we cannot fight,

The darkest of our nightmares, dare we do?

 

Some venture beyond the surface,

The thrill of adrenaline, deeper we go,

Finding new and many more, unexplored,

But none dare speak on the lives lost,

 

Some lost air, many a lost life,

Pulled beneath the colours of blues,

Thrown down by the pretence of white,

Crashing into the golden but not so soft,

 

How far can we go before we can’t?

Eye sight lost and lungs in desperate need,

Competition states your failure, not determined,

You weren’t found again, another one claimed,

 

Occasionally a dark violent reminder,

Thrashing on our doors, screaming in our ear,

Hurtling lies and fear into our day and age,

Ne’er can we escape nor forget permanent,

 

Again, donning the colours of the sky,

Coated in sugar, luring us to the edge,

Dip a toe in, take a second plunge,

Purely innocent, free from the land,

 

Imitating the twinkling of stars,

Captivating the warmth of the sun,

Pulling at our dreams, forth we go,

Venturing beyond the blue of sea.

 

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of people and thoughts.
Occasionally a dark violent reminder,
Thrashing on our doors, screaming in our ear,
Hurtling lies and fear into our day and age,
Ne’er can we escape nor forget permanent"
The above lines, I did like. Thank you my friend for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Sunburn]

The poem has a deeper level. The first reading gave me no understanding to be honest. But as I read on a few more times, the view became clearer to me.

The poem seems to have been constructed with both thoughts of life and dream.

You have used lots of accurate words to display stunning imageries throughout the poem. Words like donning adds clear vision in the readers minds...

There are stages in the poem where the reader has been brought into a position to ponder upon various thoughts and questions and think deeply. The journey of the dream has been magnificent.

Well written work...

[Anna]

Great imagery. It was slightly confusing but enjoyable to read

[WillaDanvers]

Thank you Anna :)

[drew garner]

Too me this was almost lovecraftian in it's darkness with imagery that Tove Jansson would be proud of. Too the person who commented before me I would say if you think poetry should be like your sink when their is dirty dishes (something you can turn off and on that has an annoying purpose) then you don't get poetry. I loved this one, maybe not your best work but you have set a pretty high standard.

[WillaDanvers]

Thank you very much for your kind words Drew, I too believe it isn't one of my best as it is very cryptic and I guess it relates to my mind but can be harder for someone else to understand. But I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Gabriel]

I found this poem confusing. What is it about? I'm not sure, I'm sorry :(

[WillaDanvers]

It's about the ocean in the most basic sense, but it's also about life, the things we fear, it is what you want it to be and what you can get from it. Don't overthink it, it's not just one thing