Paper Cup Wishes

In a paper cup of wishes,

fragments of the past swim

like guppies waiting to be eaten

by lost dreams in a vast ocean

 

Sipping slowly, another swallow

I notice the cup now empty,

with the exception of one

still stuck to the bottom

 

Tapping the base, it falls to the bar,

wiggles a bit and then dies,

no movement…

Sliding the cup forward, I ask for a refill

 

With a flick of your finger

what was left of my dreams

falls to the floor, covered now in sawdust

You shove the cup back and answer, no!

 

Reviews

[s y e]

Will this is fantastically written. You really are the man for powerful metaphors and all! Loved this one!

[willweb]

Thank you Noodlehead for your kind review.

[Chris Micha]

Very unique, Will. A very strong metaphor that you did a great job with!

[willweb]

Once more, thank you Christian for your nice comments.

[lissalovesyou]

Nice....
"Paper cup of wishes"
I love that line.
lissalovesyou:)
(sorry about the late review)

[willweb]

Thank you so much Lisa. It is not a problem, your comments are worth waiting for.

[Rita L. Sev]

For some, when a dream does not come to fruition quickly enough, that's the end. But there are always new dreams to be had... Great analogy here, Will!

[willweb]

You are right Rita. Thank you for your comments today.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You write such descriptive poems Will.I loved this :)

[willweb]

Thank you again Vidya my friend. Your comments mak me happy.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Your poetry makes me happy ...well sometimes sad because they are sad so I think we are even lol.You are welcome Will :)

[Fran Marie]

Oh my , a powerful piece here... great metaphor and vivid imagery.so nicely penned

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Fran Marie for reading and commenting on my poem today. I am more than happy you enjoyed it.

[Matching Socks]

Lovely. :)
Original, beautifully spoken.

[willweb]

Thank you again for your nice words to me.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is extremely vivid, and powerful. Great imagery here. Nice write.

[willweb]

Thank you so much my friend for your nice comments again. I am glad you liked this one.

[Moonie]

So what you're saying is that dreams die if we don't live them soon enough and change into something no more valuable than saw dust? :)) I love the excellent metaphors that you used. Truly an exceptional read. :))

[willweb]

Thank you so very much my friend. What I was saying was that the writer's perspective was that his dreams were lost in that moment. However, I don't think anyone should give up on their dreams no matter how lost they seem to be. I am happy you enjoyed this as I enjoyed your comments very much.

[Cory Barrett]

Hopes and dreams are easily drowned, especially if they are all contained and never allowed out of their infancy. Unfortunately guppies are meant for fodder. Good write

[willweb]

Thank you again Streamline. I am happy you enjoyed my poem.