A delicatessen or something

 

 

I found a pen in the street

embellished with the logo

of the funeral home over on Main 

 

It felt good in my hand

like I could maybe use it to write

a beautiful love poem 

 

I pulled a piece of paper

from my back pocket

and scribbled on it until I saw ink

 

Then I wrote,

 

Here among the shadows

of my lonely broken heart

merely but a ghost this empty place

 

I died the day you walked away

so very long ago

drowning in the tears that fell my face

 

In disgust, I tossed the pen

back where I found it

and shoved the paper deep into my pocket

 

Maybe next time 

I will find a pen from a

delicatessen or something

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

why did I laugh? On the surface - this is funny but deeper, it is how I think we look at our gifts, ourselves, our relationships. Yeah, it hits deep.

[R Smith]

haha don't know if i should laugh but that ending was funny, it is a brilliant poem though, it really got my imagination working, its a mind stretcher and i love those :)

[willweb]

A mind stretcher, I like that. Never heard that before but I am glad I did now. Thanks so much Richard

[R Smith]

always welcome Will :)

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Such an original write that tugs at my heart and tells me a lot about the author.
I love the way you wrote the stanzas to relate to each other so closely and interlocking.
Beautiful write!

[willweb]

Thank you Josie. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

I always like your writing! :)

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

This one was special though...

[icelandicblue]

That was very clever and fun to read. Sometimes we write an entirely different poem than we originally intended. This poem contains a very unique and original perspective.

[willweb]

Thank you Icelandicblue for your kind comments.

[Rita L. Sev]

Here's to that next pen... Nicely done, Will!

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Rita

[Einstein Noodle]

beautiful! such a suspended moment in time .. its hell to be so poetic ... i hope for sure the next pen is from that deli ... or something ;) great creative expression .. put me right there with you .. i can feel it
E.

[willweb]

Thank so much E. I am happy you liked this one.

[AprilRN1210]

oh Will!.. I love this one.. It has such a wide range of emotion within it.. I felt a touch of romanticism, of darkness, of ache, of humor.. I love pieces that make me FEEL.. this one does that.. it felt good, it hurt, and I laughed.. cannot ask for more than that.. going into my favorites!... awesome writing as usual my friend.. also love the font change..

[willweb]

Thanks so much April for your wonderful review. You humble me with your words.

[Ruth]

This is so damn excellent! The pen being from such a place, allowing the darker side of self to vent but ohhhhh....no, snap goes the rationale and places you back into hide mode....excellent hon, really love this x

[willweb]

Thank so much Poppy. I am thrilled you liked this one.

[KWP]

This is great .. i like the humour it leaves you with and I like the layers within the tow stanza's written by the pen ...

what do you think yo will gain from a deli pen? a giant salami ?

[willweb]

Thanks so much KWP for your wonderful review. I was thinking:

Ham and cheese on a kaiser roll
food for thought, good for the soul. :)

[KWP]

ahhhhh :) all I got was giant salami :D x hehe x

[s y e]

Will, I have missed reading you, not sure if you could tell but I have been on a little break from here and am trying to slowly return, not doing a good job so far, aha!

Anyway, this is excellent, you just dragged me in from the first word! I so loved the imagery and wording of this masterpiece.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Noodlehead (bumble) and I did miss you. Welcome back