Where were you

Where were you
when life was just a four letter word
which I had a hard time spelling
with a quickly fading pen
on scattered note pads
from some auto parts store
I don't even use

Where were you
when the moon was just a ball in the sky
glaring down on my weeping eyes
as I tried to sleep
beneath lonely covers
with reruns of Star Trek
controlling my dreams

Where were you
when alarm clocks were annoying
and needed to start
another day of washing machine rhythms
set on spin cycle boredom
and all colors bled through
staining my frown

Never mind, I don't really want to know
you are here now
in my arms
and that is all that matters

Please don't ever go back there again

Reviews

[Confuser]

Nice writing. I enjoyed it - packed full of emotions and oh always the great ending Will.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Dale. I am thrilled you stopped by and left such nice words on my work.

[Confuser]

Wonderful: Thanked you & Ana on Tender Hearts notes for grammar. Wow. And I love your poetry

[Einstein Noodle]

whoa! fine job! i especially appreciate the metaphor of the washing machine .. nice!
"and all colors bled through
staining my frown "
your closing lines bring to mind a resolution (my first today) lets not dredge up the past :) .. but if i feel the need .. i will look to this poem .. you hooked me and kept me going .. well done!
E.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much E. for always being so kind to me.

[Dannyisawriter]

This was just...wow!!! Great job

[willweb]

Thanks so much for those encouraging words.

[s y e]

Wow, this is deep Will and amazingly well written as always. The emotion is so strong, truly loved it.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Noodlebumble for your kindness.

[Frontier]

they were probably wondering the same things you were! haha I really liked this, so many distractions everywhere, the examples you present as someone experiencing isolation are poignant.

I enjoyed.

Merry Christmas :)

[willweb]

Thank you so much Frontier.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

In my profession, though I love the flow and description and emotion in the first three stanzas, I would say the last stanza shows a certain incongruity of affect.

[willweb]

Hey you win some and you lose some. That damn spin cycle always confuses me. Thank you John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yeah me too!

[A.J.]

absolutely perfect and touching on an extremely personal level. great work.

[willweb]

Thanks so much A.J. I am happy you enjoyed this one today. I appreciate you stopping by.

[A.J.]

I havent been as engaged in the community as of late, but I will be looking for more of your work as I re-establish a presence on here.

[willweb]

Then welcome back...what kind of guitar are you holding there?

[A.J.]

a cheaper-model Taka, but it sounds exquisite. my friends have spends a LOT of money and taylors and such and still prefer to grab mine whenever I put it down.

[willweb]

I'm with you, I have a Tak cutaway in my office. I have some of the others, but this is my favorite.

[A.J.]

and they only get sweeter with age

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Don't ask, just enjoy today. It's no use crying over spil milk...as they say. And after all, Will, Kirk and Spock are better nostalgic material then nightmares filled with sorrow and regrets. Very well done. :) Rudi

[willweb]

Thanks Rudy. Live long and prosper my friend. :)

[MomzillaNC]

What came before fades, pales in memory in the light of the joyful now. Beautifully stated.

NOTES: I recommend at least a 14pt font for this. I'd also recommend Georgia or Times for the font face because they have a softer look.

[willweb]

Thank you so much fro reading and your suggestions.

[MomzillaNC]

yw :)

[R Smith]

really great Will, the first 3 stanza's were really amusing then the last just so touching, glad it ends well :)

[willweb]

Thank you Richard...so am I. :) I appreciate you stopping by and commenting.