Goodbye Old Friend

A goodby to an old friend with some added "wishfull thinking" as far as money and living in the islands! ;)

Goodbye Old Friend

 

Hello old friend,  

 

 How have you been?  It's been so long since I've heard from you I was begining to wonder

if you were dead!

 

 I am alive, at least at this write not that you'd care or you would have written by now.

 

 I've filled out my will, left nothing to you not that I had very much to leave but..

a few thousand might have given you some relief.

 

 I am leaving to charity the bulk of my inheritance except the few hundred thousand I had set aside

for you. That money I am giving to the animal shelters its something I'm sure they can use.

 

 Oops! Forgot I hadn't told you about that inheritance.  My rich aunt I've not seen since I

was a young child, left me everything she had.  Apparantly she rememberd she liked me and my

hair!  Wasn't that nice of her?

 

 Well I hope this note has found you well it's really to bad you didn't choose to keep in touch.

All the years that I've tried so hard to get hold of you, I didn't have much, but that didn't stop me from thinking of you.  Even when the money came to me I tried to call.  Yet you never got back to me not by mail or by phone. 

 

 So goodbye old friend, stay well there in the north.  I know how you hate the cold but that can't really be helped.  I love it here on the islands there is sunshine every day and I've thought of you so often...

 

 This will most likely be my last write as I am going on a cruise with some new friends of mine.

If I like Jamaca I doubt I'll be back anytime soon.  Funny, that's the place you and I had always wanted

to go, when we used to plan our "imaginary getaways".  Life has a way of turning things awray does it not??

 

Goodbye old friend

 

 

8/13/08 Windy

Author's Note

Another "attempt" at story writing. Feel free to pick me apart... :)

Reviews

[Michael X]

Windy, this writing is heartfully creative and maintains consistant emotional imagery, i felt myself
drawn toward to aspect of charity and goodwill, as well as an abandoned friendship.. and what a
way to depart company, i liked the way you incorporated the going away trip as a bit of a topper,
there is a feeling of tearing apart, wrapped in a sentimental embrace, consuming broken affection
i really enjoyed reading this ode to goodbye, has a great way of taking the reader to the moment,

[Poeticme]

I love how it's a story and then its a poem, and then its a story again..... Nice write my lady


Poeticme

[Spat Queen]

I think that the challenge of combining a letter and a story was met quite well here. It turned out to be somewhat poetic. I enjoyed reading this creative piece.

[Last Lying Look]

Great poem! I loved the whole idea of it.
I bet that person will really be kicking themselves for snubbing you! :P

[Bear]

so manytimes I've written similar words upon a page; more like dozens of pages all in hopes that I'll be able to "let go" of the friend not heard from in "forever". I wonder if they ever think of me, as I sometimes think of them wondering how they are today? Ah well, I suppose there are those I'll never completely detach from whether they know or care.

Another good write by thee!!
Thanks for sharing!
Sallie Bear

[Angel's Lady]

hahaha Whew. I thought you meant me at first! haha (I'm still in the Will, right?) hahaha

I loved it! I think there's a name for that...isn't it called comeuppance? hahaha

Wonderful write!

[Legion]

Can I come too? I like it. Their lose. Now about that inheritance? :)

[Mr. Lopez]

I could pick apart but choose instead to pull together. Pull together your good ideas and help put them together to hopefully help you grow. I was somewhat confused while reading this . Not by the content but by the structure. I was trying to read this as a poem but my instinct told me to read it as a story. I think that if you restructure the piece as an actual letter to a old friend, that the story line (which need not change) will allow your readers to appriciate the actual story. I found the story to be very touching , even personal. I think that the opening line should read "hello old friend" as the piece ends with goodbye old friend. This gives your readers a sense of opening thought and sentament which leads to personal closure by it's end. You can take your readers on a tour of your emotions and bring them close to your heart and the content already has all the right pieces to do this. By the end of this , i found myself saddened for you both but proud ,not for but of you. For being brave enough to put such old wounds to page , giving yourself ,If no one else, much needed closure. There was no "attempt" in this piece. Only success. I think that you have much promise in writting in this style if you just let down your hair ,let loose your expectations of what others may or may not think , and allow yourslef to shine. Watch.....you will find the floodgates of creativity open and will surprise even yourself. Keep it up my friend, keep it up.

Mr. Lopez