Passing Time

The days pass by, a blur of

sights and smells and sound,

all un-be-known to you,

and the scales tip, unbalanced,

so that it feels as if

the clock flew out the window.

Really, though, once looked back at,

it was not so long ago -

the only difference here, we see

is the changed made on the inside;

the locks, keys, chains or bars,

locking down and keeping in

the things you do not want to think.

But you can't help but notice them;

the brain's trapped in a tower,

with a scarlet beating dragon

patrolling the gates,

getting its own way.

Yet perhaps, they're insignificant,

in the grand scheme of things,

because as time well tell,

that which seems important now,

in a month might seem 

not significant at all.

Reviews

[Wórdsmíth]

Again it's a piece. I liked "Passin' Time"....words're appropriate here.
all thing are good here, you did great job this time i wanna say girl...you got me by this writin', liked your way of workin'.
well written, nice ink

[Storm K.]

thanks very much :)

[LadySoDivine]

Very well done. I like the story that it tells the readers. I also like how you use dragons as metaphors, considering I love dragons. And I really like the other symbols that you use. Really excellent job!

[Storm K.]

Thank you! I really appreciate the review :)

[Buddhistboy73]

Loved this piece. You have a real knack of conjuring up great imagery in the reader's mind. "the locks, keys, chains or bars......" liked this line in particular.
"with a scarlet beating dragon patrolling the gates.." again, I liked this one....can relate!

And it#s a truism that what seems important for us right now does indeed pass....to be replaced by new (pick one) - lol! - agony/ecstacy/despair/hope/love/sorrow/.....etc!
Great write.
BB

[Storm K.]

haha, thank you so much!

[patti]

I really enjoyed reading that poem, good details and the meaning behind it... good poem

[Ria Kova]

This poem here is already printed out, with a thoughtful background and a nice frame, hanging on my bedroom wall. Another idol that'll save my life daily.
I'm just gonna memorize the whole thing, and next time people come and complain about how crappy their life feels at the moment Imma just narrate all this in respond and leave them thinking.

I love this and I love you! x

[Storm K.]

Thank you so much, it really means a lot! :)

[rnuff]

Very well written, know these emotions well.
Awesome writing!

[Storm K.]

thanks! :D

[Dark Rider]

Very nice. I love the details you put into it. And the words flowed together very well. Nice job.