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I Thought

I Thought

A Poem by Tiny Drop

I thought of you today...
Remembered the silent staring contests
How you smiled yesterday.

Then I felt awfully conflicted.

You hadn't been gone for long
I hadn't known you for long
Yet this pain in my chest was real
The emptiness, the scars,
Your loss felt deeply real.

You were a strange beautiful creature
Dancing in cold rainy fields
Your eyes were alive like nature
Twinkling marvelously in my dreams.

One word.
One whisper.
Silence.
And you're gone.

I thought we were friends,
maybe even something more.
But as usual.
"I'm wrong."
I sigh deeply. "Like I thought..."





© 2017 Tiny Drop



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I mean no offense when I say this... you are writing about the early stages of an abandonment complex.

It's well conveyed. You're a good writer.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D. David

7 Months Ago

Don't be sorry at all. Your response was thoughtful and reasoned; if you can do that every time you .. read more
Tiny Drop

7 Months Ago

I won't then, thank you for your words and your advice T K. I appreciated them very much.
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D. David

7 Months Ago

Let go, with great care just, let go... it really is that simple. What we really are tends to be si.. read more
I like the feel of this write and the emotions. This kind of has a lonely feel to it, well expressed.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tiny Drop

7 Months Ago

Thanks Kami :) that was actually the feeling I was trying to transmit, the loneliness of losing some.. read more

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Added on December 29, 2017
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Tiny Drop
Tiny Drop

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