My Brother

He always was a fighter
But never was a bully.
That's my brother.

Much like our father
Always there to help.
That's my brother.

The world's greatest hunter
He taught me what I know.
That's my brother.

He could be a liar
But is honest as can be.
That's my brother.

It really doesn't matter
What other people think.
He's my brother.

 

Reviews

[Katie]

Aww thats really touching. love short poetry like this, especially when it's done well, as this is. My favourite stanza is the third.
Can't suggest any changes. :) but that's a good thing.

[The Silk Poetess]

now that is really cute..reminds me on how much i love my own brother's.. good write

[deeps]

I like this alot.
I think it's wonderful

[H]

The first verse is my favorite. Flow isn't always important, this poem does well without it.

The fourth verse contradicts itself. He's either one or the other.

[A]

Love this poem! Hits home :) Good job!

[Kayleen]

needs some work with the flow, but you have a good base. just needs tweaking :)