Wow....your poetry always does leave me speechless. :) I love the broken lines and the simple language. They make it sound so simple but so deep. Beautiful!
saying this is amazing would be an understatement :) it was really cool, i liked the flow of it, the words, just something about it, i dont even know. nice job though :D
You create a wild vision and very good story. What the mind can dream and imagine. You brought me in with strong lines and held me to the last word. A outstanding poem. I like the ending.
Coyote
'And you sit in front of the full moon,
accidentally revealing your silhouette.'
Favourite lines in this poem. They say SO much. The addition of the word 'accidentally' turns the entire meaning around, reflecting concealment and possibly a fear of showing a dark side. Or maybe it was an accident in your eyes, a weakness that you've never seen before and will use it to your ultimate discretion. This was really well done, only thing I'd say is to ease up on the punctuation... thought I understand it's probably your style. Thanks for sharin'.
This is true, a bit wicked, and revealing.
Yes, sometimes when confronting beauty, we both long to possess and hate the bearer of such beauty. Sometimes when you look beyond the physical beauty, you find a sweet, simple soul baffled by the envy thier beauty engenders.