Haze, Highs, Hell Lows

About a guy. As usual.

I try so hard, these feelings I suppress

But like an addict, I relapse 'cuz you got me obsessed

Like oil and water floating in a bottle

You mix us all up and crank up the throttle

This can't be healthy, it's frying my brain

My throbbing heart pumps acid through my swollen veins

Funny how I slowly cease to care

Just one hit on you and I'm floating on air

A small taste is enough to bring me to my knees

You're all I think about and I am begging, dear

Please

Take me to rehab, I need to come clean

Fresh new begining and a glossy sheen

I hate how I need you just to feel alive

Can't imagine how without you, I'd survive

Forgive me if you can but I'm falling quite hard

You're breaking down my wall and you play

The High Card

As your scent fills my lungs with delicious purple smoke

I could be dead but I'm too numb to feel how I choke

On the words I need to say, to keep you away

Despite how much I wish you'd stay

The world seems to fade to an abysmal gray

My chest sunken down on the ground I lay

Just keep spinning 'round while my body's dead still

I can see my heart pound

Absorbing your presence in the form of a pill

Beneath dry bones and cracked ribs with rotting skin

Without you I'm a shadow of the monster within

Reviews

[Seshat Nidaba]

I'm just amazed you find a way to rhyme with all these strong emotions! It does have a diary feel now that you mention it. A certain poet blog wild card I-don't-know-what. Nice writing though :)

[light and ashes]

Really excellent. I can feel the deep need and desire that engulfs and entangles like a web of obsession.

[Coyote Poetry]

A poem with a wild and hard journey. I could feel the turmoil and desire to understand.
"Take me to rehab, I need to come clean
Fresh new begining and a glossy sheen
I hate how I need you just to feel alive
Can't imagine how without you, I'd survive"
The last line made the poem complete.
"Without you I'm a shadow of the monster within"
A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Jeremy Baker]

I love the last line, it's brilliant. Good structure and motif. Great writing.

[Chris]

Its good being you... being alive... FEELING something... out of the 'numbs'

Take care,
Chris

[CadeeRine]

Wonderful write. Flows very well and meaning is very deep. As you read it you feel as if you can look into the soul.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

one hit on you and I am floating on air.......forgive me, but I am falling quite hard.....inside myself I go...........we are separated like oil and water. you mix us up and crank up the volume........without you......I'm a shadow of the monster within.obsession at its finest. very well penned!