Asgard Rising: The Final Destiny of the Gods

Excerpt/Prelude of Asgard Rising: The Final Destiny of the Gods

Prologue

Mackenzie Flannery

She ran as fast as she could in the hopes she could make it inside

the safety of The Club before Andrew and the pack caught her. She

couldn’t believe that Andrew, the man she’d come to love again after

three and a half years off and on dating was a werewolf of all things.

He’d seemed nice all these years; they had even seriously started talking

about children and the future this time. Now she was being hunted like

prey, and chased through the Desert. She climbed the final hill. The

Club was in sight. Something she was glad the gift had given her was

ample grace and speed. 

She never saw them lurking in the shadows and before she made it to the door they were on top of her biting and scratching at her back. She screamed as their sharp claws punctured the thin membrane of her wings. She felt the pain ripple through her feathers. She hoped that someone could hear her over the loud music

of Lola Honey’s set, but no one came so she screamed louder, but was

cut off as the muzzle of the largest one clamped her throat silencing her

for good. She was surprised that she no longer felt any pain. The last

thing Mackenzie Flannery heard as she lay bleeding from the multiple

slashes and bites was the thump, thump of the music from Lola’s set.

She heard the fi nal applause as the set ended and Lola walked from

the stage. She never thought that they would fi nd her in such a small

town and knew that they wouldn’t know to look for her son.

Meanwhile…After the set, Lola watched as little Sean slept

peacefully in his crib and wondered where Kenzie had disappeared to

her second set was supposed to start right after Lola’s. However, the

time for her set had come and gone and Lola knew that the next time

anyone saw Kenzie it wouldn’t be a good thing, now was the time to

take Sean and leave town. Now the only place for them to go was to

live with Abel in Scotland sooner than was expected, but at least there

they might be safe, Kenzie mentioned how the packs couldn’t settle

in Scotland because of the Ancient Pact they signed centuries before

with the Temples.

Reviews

[Veronica Chandler]

Enjoyed this read very much and I see here there is a great deal of potential for more elaboration if you so choose. Amazing how so few words can tell a story this well. With a tiny bit of editing this piece has potential to be a great deal more than it already shows. Wonderfuly told!

[Sunni Davis]

Great begining! Its action pack and very descriptive. i'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this story. cant wait to read more!

[DVampire]

this sounds cool

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Exciting, the plot has gripped me immediately which is rare to say the least, well done, would love to read more, until next time, keep writing

[FJ Davis]

You are potentially a very fine storyteller, AR.
I would make one suggestion, however; regarding your reference to Andrew's having become a werewolf. It seems to me that such a shocking transformation should have more of an emotional impact on Mackenzie. How you demonstrate or convey such an impact is, of course, up to you.
Enjoyed the read.

[Duane Klinger]

It's a good story, seems like a great plot, but as always I have to do a little bit of picking. Firstly, it's all one HUGE paragraph. It's a little bit confusing. Second is a very, very simple fix. At one point "The Club" was capitalized but the next use of it wasn't. Just a few things to think about. Keep the read requests coming as you write more, I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing it with me!
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[Carter Meyer]

this looks very interesting! I can't wait to read more :)