~ I just freeze slowly

~ I just freeze slowly

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E.L. Poetry, Elisa Laura, Love, Hurt, Lost, Sad, Pain, Truth, Heartfelt, Dying, Death, Gone

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~ I just freeze slowly



In love’s breath

Where I’m lost

And will not find

My key nor 

Silver lines to see

 

I just freeze slowly

Of hurt, and lost

Interwoven

In my eternity

 

The moon is cold

She can’t shine no more

For days from now on

As she misses her love

 

The sea is wild to give a sign

On tides not in equality

Where sand is raw

And dark within denials reality

 

I will be eclipsed forever soon

As I’ve spoken my heart

I can’t go on shining

While I’m inner dying

 

The Universe is changing

And sings different notes

For what she felt within the signs

Where pure clairvoyance floats

 

And it’s no choice it’s a fact

A heart reasons dialect

The time for me has come

I will be moving on

 



 

~ Elisa Laura


© 2012



Author's Note



I played this tonight....
XxXx

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I'm sorry for your loss, but I am glad that you have come back (at least further) out of the moonlight. Though you undoubtedly learned some truths out there in the darkness. I felt a stillness and cold come over my heart reading this. It really hit me hard when you said that you couldn't see the silver lining. Really really fantastic this one, and I am glad that we have some similarities in our music. I hope that things have gotten better from this low point!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

4 Years Ago

Thank you T. for this amazing review, (didn't expect it) the better it salutes me in my early mornin.. read more



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...........Giving this one a 100 xx

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you dear! xx
Metaphorically this is beautiful and in energy oh so sad.. I freeze slowly truly says so much..Xx

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you my dear, it was written out of emotion, when my grandfather died, in 2012. Thank you so mu.. read more
light years in love

3 Years Ago

This is one of my all time favorite classical songs..You are welcome dear Elisa.

3 Years Ago

It's mine too! xx
Another beautiful poem and I loved the last line, "i will be moving on." Many of us believe we are strong but falling in love make us weak, specially if it's more kind a one sided. This poem will connect with many good write as always.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your beautiful interpretation... my friend. Your thoughts, and effort are valued by me.. read more
A. Amos

3 Years Ago

You're always welcome my dear.

3 Years Ago

Thank you, I shall play this soon again, now sad memories came back to me... and with music, we cele.. read more
it is to this tune a will tally a minute...beauty.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much :)
I'm sorry for your loss, but I am glad that you have come back (at least further) out of the moonlight. Though you undoubtedly learned some truths out there in the darkness. I felt a stillness and cold come over my heart reading this. It really hit me hard when you said that you couldn't see the silver lining. Really really fantastic this one, and I am glad that we have some similarities in our music. I hope that things have gotten better from this low point!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

4 Years Ago

Thank you T. for this amazing review, (didn't expect it) the better it salutes me in my early mornin.. read more
I feel this one with every fiber of my being...I never had the chance to say good bye to my sister, nor would I have wanted to.

'I will be eclipsed forever soon
As I’ve spoken my heart
I can’t go on shining
While I’m inner dying'

You own my tears tonight lovely lady.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

4 Years Ago

Let them flow freely here on Eli's place... you're embraced with my arms! X sister.... be back soon .. read more
Bittersweet and sad. Flowed a bit like an old blues song in spots. Like in the secand and third stanza. Just beautiful...

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much.... BR, :) good to see you again, I'm slow, I know... will come back for your awes.. read more
Sometimes goodbye is a second chanbe. One of my favourite poetries soo far.. Till then live out loud.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kenilo Kent

4 Years Ago

Its ok, thanks. But you are always welcome. I love poetry as poetry. And keep on writing more. Be yo.. read more
Kenilo Kent

4 Years Ago

Tc

4 Years Ago

Always dear, thank you so much! :)
Losing the warmth of another's light as it leaves the chambers of one's heart, thus leaving it to slowly freeze. Quite an interesting depiction you casted, in moonlight. But, that slow freeze can be warded off with the occurrence of another light taking place and filling the void. Question is, would you be willing to open the doors once more? Many ponder, and many return to square one on a lower note. It is almost like gambling, with your soul as the chips and happiness as the jackpot. Favoriting this.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RedInk524

4 Years Ago

oops, I mistook the poem to be about love lost. Hmmm, I guess that just means that the poem is tha.. read more
RedInk524

4 Years Ago

Sorry for your loss

4 Years Ago

No worries, you couldn't know... perceptions, and assumptions are born in self-experiences, so nothi.. read more

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Tags: E.L. Poetry, Elisa Laura, Love, Hurt, Lost, Sad, Pain, Truth, Heartfelt, Dying, Death, Gone

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