~ And On The Final Day

~ And On The Final Day, Travelers Romance, Love, Poetry Free Style, E.L. Elisa Laura Perfume

~ And On The Final Day

 

 

There was a table for two,

   On the end of the train carriage,

       I smelled your perfume as light as the wind;

It felt more familiar than ever,

    It was like I made love to you from afar,

         By the pure smell of your skin;

And the smell merged with

     Robust heart notes mixed with a fresh

          Touch of citrus and lavender,

Soft as the wind, to spoil my nose,

      And then you grabbed my hand,

            You rough firm handshake, was your character,

One could blindly recognize you with;

      And so I turned around, and

             Swallowed in tenderness, of love

Red cheeks, as fresh  as wild roses,

       With some dew on it…

              No, it was you, I didn’t dream it,

And the sparkles in your eyes,

         Were as if I read the most beautiful novel,

                While I stared at you...

A novel, I almost finished; but kept on

          Reading and repeating,

                 So the last chapter would never end,

It just needed to be there... for eternity;

          Over and over again, in the train scene;

                  Where they finally met, on their way

To the heart of Barcelona…

 

           ~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you for reading xx

Sorry always for the many "edits" I am Dutch.
Just remember it, I catch up errors, all the time,
And I'm my own worst enemy ;-)
Not editing ever to be in the live feed....
I'm rather invisible ;-)

Reviews

[Pax]

How romantic, those moments, the first meeting of soulmates, the wonderful feeling it brought to the two lonely soul's journey, the noticeable bond between lovers - oh those feelings... i felt it here... a captivating scene you had brought us into this expressive piece... I really do like it...

Thank you for being a passenger on the love train too xx

[Lover Of Words]

Goodness girl this is amazing... you sure have a way to make everything so amazing BEAUTIFUL

Thank you very much Kels!!!

[Lover Of Words]

You are so welcome love

[Sasha]

oh my gosh this is absolutely amazing !!
I loved every part of it !!
keep writing!

Thank you dear Sasha! always xx

[Inda]

Great piece! If only we could hold on to those moments that pass by so quickly. Love this!

Thank you so much my friend, for being here. :) I appreciate you and your words.

[Lydia Shutter]

The acoustic guitar was the perfect accompaniment to your words here, Elisa. The photo reminded me of my travels on Eurorail so many years ago. There is something innately romantic about train travel. Something magical about feeling the vibration of the train while looking into dreamy eyes of love.
"And the sparkles in your eyes, were as if I read the most beautiful novel" Heavy sigh! What a lovely scene this is...and the emotion pours over the edges of every line. A bit poignant, but oh so romantic. I could almost smell his cologne! Wonderful work, my friend. Knuffels, Lydi**

Ah so good it could bring you those memories back Lydi, I'm so happy to see you like this one, thank you very much, heel knuffels xx

[jacob erin-cilberto]

beautiful poem...i want to know what happened next.how the novel finally ended...did they actually talk to each other? meet?

you created such a romantic scene of fantasy and reality mixed together...even the speaker seemed unsure as to which was which.

I think that scene will be re-played forever in my heart and mind my friend... I hope it not ends actually LOL... :D it only may continue ;) You're right... the speaker was confused ;) by the emotions, that rolled out of the quill.... yet I kept it like that :) thank you so much dear... I was on your page... just now!

[Poetic Beauty]

Chance encounters of meeting someone. The excitement and replaying of a special moment in time that that captures the essence of how it all began and grew into something more. The smells help set the scene and allow you to understand the character better in this piece. Stunning details as always.

Oh my dear friend, thank you... your reviews always give me a feeling, I must continue writing. :) thank you so much for being around always! xx

[Poetic Beauty]

You are quite welcome. Your poetry paints pictures in the mind almost like stepping into a dream for a brief moment, experiencing the moment first hand.

Thank you so very much again.... that means the world to me.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

TRULY BEAUTIFUL!!xx

You have encapsulated his scent in the intricate details which swept you off your feet, and the moment will be etched in eternity...such a dreamy journey Eli!


"Were as if I read the most beautiful novel,

While I stared at you...

A novel, I almost finished; but kept on

Reading and repeating,

So the last chapter would never end,

It just needed to be there... for eternity;

Over and over again, in the train scene;

Where they finally met, on their way

To the heart of Barcelona…"~ This is an eloquent painting to behold...you have written with grace and brilliance...Breathtaking!~xoxo~

Thank you so much, you know me well, and know my heart.... :) I'm ever thankful to you my dear... one day I'll take you to Barca! :D xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I can only dream, until then... (sigh)

My pleasure to read your dreamy writes, Sis! XXXX :)

Me too... Did you saw the movie: Vicky Chistina Barcelona? if not you should... the perfect example of how American women get relaxed in Europe LOL here's the link: http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0497465/

you will love it.... I can't wait either! XXX :D

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Oh I've always wanted to watch that movie... just forgot... Thank you for reminding me!

I'll watch it tonight... before I go to bed! :D

Ooh you should, you will have a great time after ;-) LOL hahaha winky wink... :D

[koty bell]

This was classic romance at its best excellent write:)

Oh thank you so much koty, for giving me a read! very kind of you :)

[koty bell]

No prob ur an excellent writer and i mean that:) hope to read ur next piece

Thank you so dearly for saying so, I try :)

[koty bell]

I tell it like it is just keep up the gteat work friend:)

Aw, thank you my friend... this was a very heartfelt one, I'm ever grateful to you :))

[koty bell]

Awwww thx sweetie:) and there is one thing u could do pretty plz:0