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~ Soft Whispers

~ Soft Whispers

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~ Soft Whispers, Elisa Laura, Dark, Fantasy, Ambient, Dreams, Dream Visions, Night Walks

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~ Soft Whispers

 

 

Soft sounds,

Rippling, like fingers

On a table

 

Long pauses, silence…

Returning rhythms,

The whirl of thoughts

 

Of you in me...

 

I hear you for years,

In nights, like these

 

Before the moon is full,

Do you want 

           To tell me something?

 

“Tell it to me,

            Say it!”


Stop whispering…!

 

You can trust me,

The sea is ours

 

And I was there for centuries,

But your name was the future,

 

Like a mirror of the ocean,

 

Now we will never be

Together, my own soul,

 

My previous life...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura


© 2013



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I love the vastness of this poem. It uses references to such a wide expanse as a backdrop and it really is a benefit to what I am feeling that you are meaning. The contrast between vast and specific, centuries of time and things that happen in a moment...the wide expanse of the sea and the specificity of fingers tapping on a table, it all adds to the feeling of the depths of this emotion. You have made me realize something about writing; I need to take an idea from music and use it in my poetry. In musical recordings there is something they call the "Pad" in the background. It is not an instrument. Instead it is the collective "background noise" which the producer/sound engineer has built into a feeling. The Pad includes the echo of a wide opened room, or the immediacy of the feeling the singer is right there in bed with you. All these feelings are part of it. If you hear a seagull just for as second in a song, then you immediately think of that song as taking place at the beach. In the case of this poem, the clever "pad" you set down of vast time depth and wide ranges of distance really supported the themes well.

Posted 3 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

It is something I notice that good writers can do, but other writers really can't. It is the art of.. read more
Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

We had studied something like that in a poetry workshop I took. We did a lesson called "overstateme.. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

That IS what I am talking about! Brilliant use of understatement!! It allows the audience to parti.. read more



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Innuendos and suggestions woven into a lamentation that becomes a fabric of beauty, a soul disrobing and exposing its wounds. I loved this. Excellent work!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much my dear friend! :) I'm so glad you loved this. Elisa
A beautiful and true poem. Sweet faces and places appear in dreams and places left and seem so far away.
"Before the moon is full,
Do you want
To tell me something?"
I wonder do old voices are reminding us. We had loved once and can still? No weakness in the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you so so much for feeling this one... my dear friend... you feel the piece so well. I wonder .. read more
There is so much depth to this poem (and all your poems, really), that I usually feel a quick comment or short review won't do them justice.

But I read your comment below, saying that it "came back to me...as a whisper," and I think I partially understand. It seems as though you are communicating with someone you had known in a previous life, perhaps another soul. And in this dream, or vision, he or she was trying to speak to you.

And I get a sense of longing, wishing that you could be together again, but perhaps in this lifetime, it's not physically possible. So the only way that you two can still meet and speak with one another is in the "non-physical" plane, what we sometimes refer to as the dream world.

I've had so-called "dreams" like that, too, and they are the most mystical and meaningful. But I don't think our conscious minds can always figure them out.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much Eric, for this thoughtful review... I like it what you got out of it, and see in t.. read more
Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

Guess what? Your poem partly inspired me to write about one of my visions that I had, that has stuc.. read more
The end of the poem is so meaningful...radiates dark feeling, pain, melancholy, but also strong connection with the soul. Soft whispers of another world, another time, when nothing is the same as the present moment. Past life, or just the past, without memory, empty, so this whispers are so clear ...Sounds full of loneliness, dear Eli.

:: nour ::
::03.014::

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much my all, that means the world to me, especially to this poem, for it came back to m.. read more
Sugar Plum ♥

3 Years Ago

I wish you feel good, dearest sis and pray for you!

3 Years Ago

I do for you too..... I know we have to catch up on many things, and I so look forward to our moment.. read more
Like a mirror of the ocean...what an amazing and powerful metaphor, I love that :) Well I guess there isn't much I can add to all the reviews that have already been posted sis, I can only say that your words spoke volumes to me here...it conjures up so many emotions. A gorgeous piece you've penned here Eli...love and hugs :) xoxo

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Yes, you do always! what would I do without you? *smiling* thank you for saying that, know I read yo.. read more
kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much sis, you've brought a smile to my face with your words :) xox

3 Years Ago

I'm so glad I could do... bro! you are important, and precious to me. -xx-
The sounds of silence are far worse than enduring the spoken word of reality. You shall always move past these moments, if only they didn't take so long to reach your ears!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

I love your interpretation of this poem, I wrote right after being out of my unconciousness. Thank y.. read more
First, I love that you add music in the background to your poems. It just brings everything full circle.
Secondly, your writing is just so refreshing and calming. I love reading it!
Another fantastic piece from you.

~Stefanie

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you dear one, for your lovely words, they are treasured by me! -x-
This one was brilliant! so stunning.. one of the best poems I´ve read in a while, with such depth and emotion. Amazing job!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

So glad you liked it, Johanna, thank you darlin -xx- :)
Totally love this one. The added charm of music is taking it to new heights.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Vandana... I appreciate your review.
This is just breathtaking... and it somehow put me at ease while reading it thank you

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

I'm glad to hear it helepd you... omg so thankful about that... know I'm back soon.... xxxxxxxx till.. read more

3 Years Ago

(helped) sorry typed too fast... xxx
Lover Of Words

3 Years Ago

Its okay thank you

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