~ Soft Whispers

~ Soft Whispers

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~ Soft Whispers, Elisa Laura, Dark, Fantasy, Ambient, Dreams, Dream Visions, Night Walks

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~ Soft Whispers

 

 

Soft sounds,

Rippling, like fingers

On a table

 

Long pauses, silence…

Returning rhythms,

The whirl of thoughts

 

Of you in me...

 

I hear you for years,

In nights, like these

 

Before the moon is full,

Do you want 

           To tell me something?

 

“Tell it to me,

            Say it!”


Stop whispering…!

 

You can trust me,

The sea is ours

 

And I was there for centuries,

But your name was the future,

 

Like a mirror of the ocean,

 

Now we will never be

Together, my own soul,

 

My previous life...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura


© 2013



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I love the vastness of this poem. It uses references to such a wide expanse as a backdrop and it really is a benefit to what I am feeling that you are meaning. The contrast between vast and specific, centuries of time and things that happen in a moment...the wide expanse of the sea and the specificity of fingers tapping on a table, it all adds to the feeling of the depths of this emotion. You have made me realize something about writing; I need to take an idea from music and use it in my poetry. In musical recordings there is something they call the "Pad" in the background. It is not an instrument. Instead it is the collective "background noise" which the producer/sound engineer has built into a feeling. The Pad includes the echo of a wide opened room, or the immediacy of the feeling the singer is right there in bed with you. All these feelings are part of it. If you hear a seagull just for as second in a song, then you immediately think of that song as taking place at the beach. In the case of this poem, the clever "pad" you set down of vast time depth and wide ranges of distance really supported the themes well.

Posted 4 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

It is something I notice that good writers can do, but other writers really can't. It is the art of.. read more
Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

We had studied something like that in a poetry workshop I took. We did a lesson called "overstateme.. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

That IS what I am talking about! Brilliant use of understatement!! It allows the audience to parti.. read more



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To love in a past life...was it as hard as it is in the now? I often wonder. Surely we are not subject to this kind of pain again and again. May we get it right in one lifetime.

Regards

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Lovely poignant words my friend, thanks a lot, this one was a real dream of me.... (do you know what.. read more
I have chillbumps all over me. *shakes* This is brilliant and the flow is felt perfectly. The imagery of the full moon and the sea worked well for the experience. I love it!! I'm working on a novel about lovers, told through their past lifes. So I'm excited you wrote this. Truly a masterpiece.

And I was there for centuries,
But your name was the future..xo


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you dear, for the feelings and beautiful words towards this one, I knew you would love it ;) M.. read more
light years in love

3 Years Ago

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3 Years Ago

Hugssss dear buddy xxxxx
This piece takes on a life of it's own, covering many themes and a pleasure for the reader, well done.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you mo chara! I'll come back for you sweet friend xo :)
Thomas Fitzgerald

3 Years Ago

Thank you and your very welcome x

3 Years Ago

Thank you again Thomas xx sorry I'm so slow.....
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Pax
Oh, there is a haunting feeling of this piece that can send tingling sensation that this pervious life is telling you something. Trying to connect you from the previous lives, on which you can never be one. Generation to generation, there will always come a time that you’ll feel the connection to this person. The very you of the past. I slightly believed in reincarnation, but that’s to be proven 100% first but for now this is our mere vision trying to tell us something that will make us completely whole again as you embrace now, to pick up the broken pieces of the past to be one with the future. This is a great piece big sis. Thanks for sharing such journey in your vision.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

I just not know what to do without you brother, you always read through everything lol....

3 Years Ago

Glitches, bro... urgh! all I said, stays on your profile, ;) take good care, sleep well, till after .. read more
Pax

3 Years Ago

merry christmas, enjoy your time with your family... have a blast on the holidays season...
This truly is enchanting, mysteriously beautiful work. Each stanza is a poem in itself. this is the kind of poem that never ends in the reader's heart, it just lingers, whispers, soothes, and blossoms into something more magical each time. Absolutely loved this, my friend.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend... when you come by, you always brighten the day. :) wishing you happy h.. read more
As vast as the ocean...as eternal as the stars in the sky.....love is always there and always whispering to us in tones only we can hear. Your words, as always, are enchanting. They cast a spell on the reader. Whenever I reach the end of one of your poems, I am sad there is no more to read. Elisa, this is just beautiful. Knuffels, Lydi**

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Lydi!!! zo goed dat je terug bent, en bedankt voor je mail, ik zal snel terug schrijven... :) thank .. read more
A splendid and enchanting poem. You weave such magic with your words.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

I can't thank you enough sweet Tina. :) me is smiling here.... x
Tina Kline

3 Years Ago

You're so welcome!
time is an illusion. all lives are one .

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you Paul, for your sharp short words :)
Paul Seaman

3 Years Ago

I always think of poetry as condensed speach, much like a photograph compared to a video. I will re.. read more

3 Years Ago

You humble me Sir. thank you. Will do the very same towards your stuff, just in weekends, I'm always.. read more
Hi Sis, how are you, just got a computer for the holidays, so I am here to give it a try at your poem, hopefully I would get close to what it signifies

According to the title of the poem, voices creep inside a sound to deliver a message and grasp attention by annoyment making it almost difficult to ignore them

At times they dissapear, and they return when thoughts remember them

When their failed cycle is complete, they are asked if there is something else they want to say or if is that all because they repeat the same message

They are told to be direct without open phrases that takes the mind to wonder into multiple interpretations hidden in the sound of the waves

The sounds have always been there until somebody paid attention to them and was able to decypher what they are trying to tell

"Now we will never be Together, my own soul,"

This part is the most amazing, because is saying that now that is able to know what it signifies, it makes it understand that they are separate entities with each one with its own place, a nature life that repeats itself and is almost predictable, and an own life that is able to think and adjusts in different chosen directions

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thanks Sis, for this nice review, I always am happy when you come by, and I can dive into your point.. read more
Wow, reminds me of a lucid dream, you jump, no that's not the word............you transition between different situations that all link up with an overarching meaning.

On the first scan read (sorry, I know you shouldn't with poems) I thought it may be about an old love or unfulfilled love. But the story I'm getting is your hearing whispers of a previous life.

Apparently you can meet previous incarnations of yourself in dreamscapes but I've never achieved it.

Beautiful wording with deeper meaning, this is classy stuff lady.

I don't know how to say "well done" in Dutch, but if I did :)

Bit of polish instead. Na zdrowie!! (I'm terrible at polish spelling, their alphabet is fiendish)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you Samuel, for the great review, I love to puzzle my readers normally a bit.. ;) but believe .. read more

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Tags: ~ Soft Whispers, Elisa Laura, Dark, Fantasy, Ambient, Dreams, Dream Visions, Night Walks

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