~ Soft Whispers

~ Soft Whispers

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~ Soft Whispers, Elisa Laura, Dark, Fantasy, Ambient, Dreams, Dream Visions, Night Walks

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~ Soft Whispers

 

 

Soft sounds,

Rippling, like fingers

On a table

 

Long pauses, silence…

Returning rhythms,

The whirl of thoughts

 

Of you in me...

 

I hear you for years,

In nights, like these

 

Before the moon is full,

Do you want 

           To tell me something?

 

“Tell it to me,

            Say it!”


Stop whispering…!

 

You can trust me,

The sea is ours

 

And I was there for centuries,

But your name was the future,

 

Like a mirror of the ocean,

 

Now we will never be

Together, my own soul,

 

My previous life...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura


© 2013



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I love the vastness of this poem. It uses references to such a wide expanse as a backdrop and it really is a benefit to what I am feeling that you are meaning. The contrast between vast and specific, centuries of time and things that happen in a moment...the wide expanse of the sea and the specificity of fingers tapping on a table, it all adds to the feeling of the depths of this emotion. You have made me realize something about writing; I need to take an idea from music and use it in my poetry. In musical recordings there is something they call the "Pad" in the background. It is not an instrument. Instead it is the collective "background noise" which the producer/sound engineer has built into a feeling. The Pad includes the echo of a wide opened room, or the immediacy of the feeling the singer is right there in bed with you. All these feelings are part of it. If you hear a seagull just for as second in a song, then you immediately think of that song as taking place at the beach. In the case of this poem, the clever "pad" you set down of vast time depth and wide ranges of distance really supported the themes well.

Posted 3 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

It is something I notice that good writers can do, but other writers really can't. It is the art of.. read more
Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

We had studied something like that in a poetry workshop I took. We did a lesson called "overstateme.. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

That IS what I am talking about! Brilliant use of understatement!! It allows the audience to parti.. read more



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ron
Wonderfully romantic. I love it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ron

3 Years Ago

You are very much welcome Elisa. It is nice to see you here to

3 Years Ago

Aw thanks again! :) I subscribed to you, so I will catch up on your writings too!
ron

3 Years Ago

You are most welcome.
Oh my!...How did I miss this one, Sis?....
Such an eerie haunting with your dreams.... I felt the struggle of an entity... one that scratches the inner walls of your darkest psyche...

You kept my mind reeling as I read this...as the ending left open to a portal of another life...WOW!

Magnetic write, Eli... BRAVO!!~xoxo~:)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Yes, thank you Sis! you are the first who finds it eerie, it was eerie. But beautiful. You always kn.. read more
Robbie~xoxo~

3 Years Ago

Your writes are always beautiful, Sis... this one was felt deeper into the sea of dreams... for me t.. read more

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much lovely. I think you're right, maybe it was... I'm experimenting with this lately. .. read more
The all knowing eye....the whispers....needing focus and clarity in self....amazing! Thank-you!

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear Queenie, your words mean much to me! xo
I love the vastness of this poem. It uses references to such a wide expanse as a backdrop and it really is a benefit to what I am feeling that you are meaning. The contrast between vast and specific, centuries of time and things that happen in a moment...the wide expanse of the sea and the specificity of fingers tapping on a table, it all adds to the feeling of the depths of this emotion. You have made me realize something about writing; I need to take an idea from music and use it in my poetry. In musical recordings there is something they call the "Pad" in the background. It is not an instrument. Instead it is the collective "background noise" which the producer/sound engineer has built into a feeling. The Pad includes the echo of a wide opened room, or the immediacy of the feeling the singer is right there in bed with you. All these feelings are part of it. If you hear a seagull just for as second in a song, then you immediately think of that song as taking place at the beach. In the case of this poem, the clever "pad" you set down of vast time depth and wide ranges of distance really supported the themes well.

Posted 3 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

It is something I notice that good writers can do, but other writers really can't. It is the art of.. read more
Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

We had studied something like that in a poetry workshop I took. We did a lesson called "overstateme.. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

That IS what I am talking about! Brilliant use of understatement!! It allows the audience to parti.. read more
This is simply and unequivocally gorgeous. It is hypnotic as the voice of the poem spoke I listened raptly:

You can trust me,

The sea is ours

And I was there for centuries,

But your name was the future,

Just beautiful Elisa...just beautiful.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you my friend, for your beautiful review. Made my day xx
This is so beautiful and heartfelt.The images are so vivid.I see it all, I feel it all:)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vidya Bacchus

3 Years Ago

Hahaha you are welcome :)

3 Years Ago

Haha, thank you, this phone does automatically correct things, and made your beautiful name, like Wi.. read more
Vidya Bacchus

3 Years Ago

LOL..........:)
Love the structure of your writing, poems dont have to rhyme and this basically reveals your thoughts thanks for sharing it. My fave line is "of you and me" and "you can trust me" it just stands out :P

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Oh, what's your name then? so I never mistake again ;) have a great day too, many thanks again.
The Lost Little Lily

3 Years Ago

Sorry about that getting ready for school. My name janine :)

3 Years Ago

No worries, thanks for telling me, nice to meet you Janine :)
While this may black and white to you It is not to me. Though it touches my thoughts and feelings It doesnt explain your own to me. A dream a dream is what it is for me

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Hi Taters, oh thank you dear one, for your review, I appreciate your thoughts, was on your page toni.. read more
Tate Morgan

3 Years Ago

lol well i am just getting my leggs back under me for writing thank you

3 Years Ago

hahaha... take the time my friend lol
My favorite stanza is,
"You can trust me,
The sea is ours".

This is a mysterious, haunting and beautiful poem! I could feel the emotion all the way through.
I absolutely love reading your poetry; it has a unique quality, and beauty that no other poetry has. It grabs onto the depths of the soul. You have a way with words. You tell a clear story, and paint a vivid picture, yet your poetry has a lot of mystique. This poem really spoke to me, Elisa. Thank you!


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

That's truly felt by me, darlin, I know when you say something you mean it.... it's 1:30 AM here, an.. read more
Calissa Knox

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Elisa. :)

3 Years Ago

My pleasure, and thank you dear friend :) always! for your wonderful reviews...

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Tags: ~ Soft Whispers, Elisa Laura, Dark, Fantasy, Ambient, Dreams, Dream Visions, Night Walks

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