~ Soft Whispers

~ Soft Whispers

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~ Soft Whispers, Elisa Laura, Dark, Fantasy, Ambient, Dreams, Dream Visions, Night Walks

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~ Soft Whispers

 

 

Soft sounds,

Rippling, like fingers

On a table

 

Long pauses, silence…

Returning rhythms,

The whirl of thoughts

 

Of you in me...

 

I hear you for years,

In nights, like these

 

Before the moon is full,

Do you want 

           To tell me something?

 

“Tell it to me,

            Say it!”


Stop whispering…!

 

You can trust me,

The sea is ours

 

And I was there for centuries,

But your name was the future,

 

Like a mirror of the ocean,

 

Now we will never be

Together, my own soul,

 

My previous life...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura


© 2013



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I love the vastness of this poem. It uses references to such a wide expanse as a backdrop and it really is a benefit to what I am feeling that you are meaning. The contrast between vast and specific, centuries of time and things that happen in a moment...the wide expanse of the sea and the specificity of fingers tapping on a table, it all adds to the feeling of the depths of this emotion. You have made me realize something about writing; I need to take an idea from music and use it in my poetry. In musical recordings there is something they call the "Pad" in the background. It is not an instrument. Instead it is the collective "background noise" which the producer/sound engineer has built into a feeling. The Pad includes the echo of a wide opened room, or the immediacy of the feeling the singer is right there in bed with you. All these feelings are part of it. If you hear a seagull just for as second in a song, then you immediately think of that song as taking place at the beach. In the case of this poem, the clever "pad" you set down of vast time depth and wide ranges of distance really supported the themes well.

Posted 3 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

It is something I notice that good writers can do, but other writers really can't. It is the art of.. read more
Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

We had studied something like that in a poetry workshop I took. We did a lesson called "overstateme.. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

That IS what I am talking about! Brilliant use of understatement!! It allows the audience to parti.. read more



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Such a haunting quality to your thoughts... softly moving, deeply resonating.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much darlin, this was a real dream.... :) I am so happy to see you by! xx
Wow,what a great poem,Loved it!! You started off totally fabulous,the end brought so much sorrow everyone deserve happiness:) thanks for sharing*

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much Carl :) always happy to see ya!
I had to slow down and read this word by word! The flow of perceiving images with your words was nice...I wonder the metaphor.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Shane... :) I will tell you the metaphor one day ;)
Shane Hogan Poetry

3 Years Ago

I hope so :) The suspense is killing me, I hope it lasts!

3 Years Ago

;) I will........... he he
I can relate to this beautiful poem in so many ways Elisa. It is as if you have taken a peek into my heart.

The dream like feel of your words is almost as though a whisper - or a soft breath in the moonlight.
You have so much talent. You never cease to amaze me.

:) Julie

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much Julie :) for your wonderful words, upon this write. Hope you have a great evenin.. read more
There isn't much I can say to express how
much I love this piece.so im just gonna smile.
And I really wish you can feel my smile,
because I feel your words.
I am truly blessed to read your work.
This is absolutely brilliant.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear Edgar, for being here, and to spread your thoughts... I feel honored with y.. read more
simply breathtaking, these words...we have to express our feelings or they will pass us by...

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

And then I did hear a whisper, from a very good friend.... and I had to express how grateful I was t.. read more
This reminds me of an old soul speaking to us, whispering soft voices reminding us like dejavu of the past as if we did something from the previous life that we did today. Very nice!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear friend, for pointing out what you got out of it... I think you as a true navi.. read more
captain

3 Years Ago

welcome, as the navigator the flow of emotions is my drive :).
"Now we will never be
Together, my own soul,

My previous life..."


Never say never! Your poem touched me on so many levels tonight.. A Beautiful verse from a Beautiful Soul.. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~soft hugs~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

PearlPoet

3 Years Ago

Have a great one dear One! ~smiles~ Im not going to sleep yet, Jacob's review awakened me ~winks~

3 Years Ago

Thanks, a lot! I will come by soon for your newest ;)
PearlPoet

3 Years Ago

Rest, no need for hurry I will be "around" for awhile...
This is one of those things you just can't simply read. You have to feel your way through each word and line and it doesn't feel as though it ends but continues on with a life of it's own after all is said. Excellent and groovy and did I mention brilliant? :) The video is awesome to!

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much Raymond... yes, to feel, and nothing but to feel... glad you could found a conne.. read more

3 Years Ago

* could find... ;) (I'm half asleep)..... be back soon for yours!

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Tags: ~ Soft Whispers, Elisa Laura, Dark, Fantasy, Ambient, Dreams, Dream Visions, Night Walks

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