~ The Heat Rays, Will Die Frozen

~ The Heat Rays, Will Die Frozen

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~ The Heat Rays, Will Die Frozen, Love, Life, Pain, Hurt, Self-Pity, Psychology, Universes, Death, dead, The Same... Geometry

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 ~ The Heat Rays,

          Will Die Frozen

 

 

I shall arise, and go now,

Through the darken night, 

I'm so lost in;

Your selfish pity monster, 

Shining furious fake warmth;

On my night of happiness;

My daylight slumber,

My hypothetical septic matter, 

The trend of your pithiness

I can't handle, the crap of ourselves,

This pathetic playful attention;

My fingers I have so crossed...

Entwined in yours, so lost;

It's you that shall be frozen,

When I'm frozen frost,

And seas of suicide...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2014


Author's Note



Dark New Years....
Enjoy xx

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Pax
How, overwhelming the pain, painted into your words, big sis. More often, the battle within is such epic proportion – “the crap of ourselves”. Sometimes, we do release it upon words of words of painful agony, until it froze in our creative craft. Immortalizing it into poetry, verse by verse, to find the answers, the healing element of the core meaning.

I believed that, when someone read it(our poetic personas, like this piece), then when someone understood what it feels and can relate to it somehow in one way or another, perhaps it brings good effect on us to be stronger than what we believed we are not, atleast that’s what I think so.

I’ve known you big sis, for quite some time now, and I know you write from a very deep perspective. So I believed this piece was taken from a very hard times or decisions or situations in your life or someone else or an experienced what you’ve seen or heard or felt. I think only a very sensitive soul can write such deep psychological perspective.

“My hypothetical septic matter” ~ so very intense, because I do believed that our own thoughts can be very poisonous if not handled very well, and in so many cases we will drown in the “seas of suicide”.

Hugs, big hugs… know that your never alone or this person, that’s what I always tell myself. It’s a big black tunnel we pass through, sometimes we just have one light guiding us and that’s more than enough for us to keep going toward the brighter path. To find that light is just a matter of self-knowing and understanding bright-sides of things hard, I know it will be hard but it’s worth a shot every time you try, so never give up is always an uplifting value.

Intense piece!

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you brother, you're true family to me ♥ Your words got cutt-off, but I read you on the live .. read more
Pax

10 Years Ago

glitches, again,:), i get worried when your not feeling well, that's what's close family we are here.. read more

10 Years Ago

Muwah! you're the best... I will, listen to you, have to go to the hospital again tomo, but it will .. read more



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Yep, I've lost the ability to capture in words how wonderful your poetry is.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

10 Years Ago

Oh boy, oh goodie xD

10 Years Ago

Ha ha ha.... ;) be aware, I love to review... when I'm free/have the time. :D xD see you soon, must .. read more
Brittany Zedalis

10 Years Ago

Oh geesh get to bed!
Deeply dark and glorious! Excellent! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you dearly my bud, for always take a look on even (my darker side)... ;) come back when I'm a .. read more
Pax has said everything that needs to be expressed. He read all my thoughts LOL ... This is nice Ms Elisa ..

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

P.s. Yes, Pax is a brilliant reviewer :) so glad to have him by on my works....
Author Unknown

10 Years Ago

I'm glad I have an uncanny allegiance .

10 Years Ago

I know you're brilliant likewise my dear friend. ;) now I just do :D
There's a slave/master vibe to this piece, without all accouterments associated with such a piece. It's like the relationship is going to hell fast and there's no way to save it. To read such a piece from your hand is quite unexpected and I like it.

Thank you for this.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

You know this isn't me right? you know me :D I must thank you for this great review my friend.....
Kenneth The Poet

10 Years Ago

I do. Not a problem at all either.

10 Years Ago

Thanks buddy, it was an "out of a body experience" ;)
amazing,just the way you said everything and the feeling i get reading it,amazing!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much.... dear xx
Where are you...Who are you now..my daytime slumber..come and wake me up. Bring me back to myself. I shall arise..beautiful

Through the darken night,
I'm so lost in;
Your selfish pity monster,
Shining furious fake warmth

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Lol we are so the same haha... I piss my pants now, coz of the fact..... ;) almost... :P oh can't wa.. read more
joshua deathdealer

10 Years Ago

Babe your poems keep me here. seriously tho. I honestly think your favorite writer on here. I check .. read more

10 Years Ago

And yours keep me here. Honestly ;) You're mine too, there is nobody who seriously can reach deeper .. read more
How to put your talents into words all i can say your beauty is as bright as the sun and your work always speaks volumes love this one

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lover Of Words

10 Years Ago

I saw the pain in your words love but your strength and wisdom will carry you as far as your smiling.. read more

10 Years Ago

Thank you love, for the sweet words, towards this piece, they mean the world to me... (((YOU))) wise.. read more
Lover Of Words

10 Years Ago

It is you whom deserves the standing ovation my love your words are painful yet somehow inspiring as.. read more
Wow! This is dark, sis....
The pain is all-consuming.
The hurt is unbearable...
I understand the self pity.... when one feels this ten-fold,
It becomes a black abyss that sucks the light out of everyone.
Especially damaging the one who cares so much.
"Septic matter" is toxic, whether it is hypothetical or not...

Intense piece!!....creatively written.~xoxo~

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Oh thank you so much again love. You always understand my brain, and the love I have for others... .. read more
Robbie~xoxo~

10 Years Ago

Me too...your heart is golden..
Profound write,sis!!XXXX

10 Years Ago

Yours too... it means a lot to me you are here. I call you soon. XXXX love
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Pax
How, overwhelming the pain, painted into your words, big sis. More often, the battle within is such epic proportion – “the crap of ourselves”. Sometimes, we do release it upon words of words of painful agony, until it froze in our creative craft. Immortalizing it into poetry, verse by verse, to find the answers, the healing element of the core meaning.

I believed that, when someone read it(our poetic personas, like this piece), then when someone understood what it feels and can relate to it somehow in one way or another, perhaps it brings good effect on us to be stronger than what we believed we are not, atleast that’s what I think so.

I’ve known you big sis, for quite some time now, and I know you write from a very deep perspective. So I believed this piece was taken from a very hard times or decisions or situations in your life or someone else or an experienced what you’ve seen or heard or felt. I think only a very sensitive soul can write such deep psychological perspective.

“My hypothetical septic matter” ~ so very intense, because I do believed that our own thoughts can be very poisonous if not handled very well, and in so many cases we will drown in the “seas of suicide”.

Hugs, big hugs… know that your never alone or this person, that’s what I always tell myself. It’s a big black tunnel we pass through, sometimes we just have one light guiding us and that’s more than enough for us to keep going toward the brighter path. To find that light is just a matter of self-knowing and understanding bright-sides of things hard, I know it will be hard but it’s worth a shot every time you try, so never give up is always an uplifting value.

Intense piece!

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you brother, you're true family to me ♥ Your words got cutt-off, but I read you on the live .. read more
Pax

10 Years Ago

glitches, again,:), i get worried when your not feeling well, that's what's close family we are here.. read more

10 Years Ago

Muwah! you're the best... I will, listen to you, have to go to the hospital again tomo, but it will .. read more

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