~ Her Deer

~ Her Deer

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~ Her Deer, Elisa Laura, Nature, Winter, Seasons, Love, Trust, Patience, Transformation, Ambrosia, Orange, Contrasts, Lyrics

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~ Her Deer

 

Twelve long days, she lived in his sanctuary

          The nights were days full of summer love;

 

Warm evenings they danced by the light of the

          Cooling moon, she was their guide,

 

But when the day came in sight, they burned away;

           And the trip was heavier than ever,

 

Slowly as their bodies repeated to dust and ashes,

            At each step they took, through this winter beauty

 

Where her heart like a lump of ice, has been glued

            To his, when they touched the frozen fields;

 

Free from sorrow, he was in the spring ragweed

             The snow was melting, by his warmth,

                       Observing her fall of heart,

 

The dead brains branched, barren by their loss,

              The leaves where so discolored;

 

But his tender creature, his dear soul,

               Could accept her how she was;

 

And he trusted the stars above him;

             When he saw her, all enlightened, in the sky

He knew time was just a phase,

 

And gave her one last look, and so he left, skittish,

             Leaving his footprints in the snow.

 

 

He was her deer ...

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura


© 2014



Author's Note



Enjoy another fantasy write.... xx

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There's a chapter in one of my favourite books that describes the idea of being careful when it comes to getting close to someone - it should be treated like a wild deer. If you make any bold moves or too much risk you'll only startle it off, so you need to be really still and let them get used to you being around and gentle let the trust build. It's based on being comfortable with someone and as someone, like myself, who is difficult to get to know properly - I relate to the concept 'deerly' (see what I did there?)

This poem reminded me of that idea and so it triggered some nice feelings - thanks for that. :) Another awesome write.

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

* I wanted and * somehow.... sorry some typo's I got skittish by your beautiful words ;)
TheSweet

3 Years Ago

Not to worry, I suffer greatly from lazy touch-typing - mistakes all over the place. :)
I'm gl.. read more

3 Years Ago

You ramble always with deep philosophies my friend, ;) so it could only be "nothing" if it's "everyt.. read more



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Love is patient and kind. Sometimes we need to provide each-other space, in order to sustain balance. As you put it, time is just a phase, it will pass, and an honest love will remain despite the length of the pause. The woman shall return to her deer/dear one, in time, and they are both aware. The trust between them and their acceptance of each-other's needs are important factors. What's portrayed here is not a farewell, for winter does not last forever, and summer will come again. Beautiful :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Great you caught that!! you are the first hehe! ;-) so happy you like my writings. I do yours too! -.. read more
Michelle N. H.

3 Years Ago

I really, really do. Thank you xx

3 Years Ago

Always welcome good friend -xx- :)
Each word so captivating, drew me in from the beginning. My mind which was so tangled with my far away thoughts were suddenly showing me the images that your poem gave. How you ended it was so well done:
''He was her deer ...''
It leaves ones mind thinking.


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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind and heartfelt words my friend, I'm so pleased you enjoyed this piece, it was.. read more
My deer your writing is simply magical and mind blowing, the beauty of your poetry take us in your world of imagination and that is your success. Thank you sharing

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

I love my past...., plus my future. I just love the world I think. I rather am in the center lol
A. Amos

3 Years Ago

we all feel the same way and it nice to sense we are still alive

3 Years Ago

Greatly said my friend.... there is no certain place on the earth nor in the universe, where a soul .. read more
This is amazing, and I promise you I don't just toss out compliments so easily. =x Love it, love it, love it!!!!
You've got a new fan.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you SomeSteve, I appreciate your true visions towards this one.... :) come back for you too :)
You really flows with this one ... If they will do a blind test of every piece without an author's name. I could still know what piece belongs to you ...

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

:) smiling, I think I would take that as a compliment... I know I have an accent he he, just like yo.. read more
Author Unknown

3 Years Ago

haha you have a good sense of humor ...I have watched you for a little while

3 Years Ago

Oh I did you too.... ;)
Well written and good choice of words,this has deep meanings which I got almost immediately. Really good wright loved the way you got the image :) and for what its worth his deer is so special but I would want him to care for the deer instead of leaving. But that's what I want,nothing is ever easy life is so unfair. All and all well done Elisa :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Try to make some fun this weekend ok? ((YOU))
Carl Drake Barnard

3 Years Ago

Hehe BUT OF COURSE :)

3 Years Ago

That's what I like to hear.... :)))
You are really something Elise, the way you put down words, it's so catching, beautiful, and it somehow stops you from leaving the poem half-read. You have to read it, read it, and then finally re-read it again :D

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much... :) it means a lot to me you came to this poem. Your words are treasured from no.. read more
Usually a poem like this would switch the genders. By turning my perception on its head, you have made a great write even betters.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you dear Kenneth. I feel honored to have you by.
Beautiful and brilliant. You always have something new and fresh! Excellent. :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

Thank you dear friend, I needed that. You made my night. :) I promised some to keep on writing.... e.. read more
There's a chapter in one of my favourite books that describes the idea of being careful when it comes to getting close to someone - it should be treated like a wild deer. If you make any bold moves or too much risk you'll only startle it off, so you need to be really still and let them get used to you being around and gentle let the trust build. It's based on being comfortable with someone and as someone, like myself, who is difficult to get to know properly - I relate to the concept 'deerly' (see what I did there?)

This poem reminded me of that idea and so it triggered some nice feelings - thanks for that. :) Another awesome write.

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

3 Years Ago

* I wanted and * somehow.... sorry some typo's I got skittish by your beautiful words ;)
TheSweet

3 Years Ago

Not to worry, I suffer greatly from lazy touch-typing - mistakes all over the place. :)
I'm gl.. read more

3 Years Ago

You ramble always with deep philosophies my friend, ;) so it could only be "nothing" if it's "everyt.. read more

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Tags: ~ Her Deer, Elisa Laura, Nature, Winter, Seasons, Love, Trust, Patience, Transformation, Ambrosia, Orange, Contrasts, Lyrics

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