~ Her Deer

~ Her Deer, Elisa Laura, Nature, Winter, Seasons, Love, Trust, Patience, Transformation, Ambrosia, Orange, Contrasts, Lyrics

 

~ Her Deer

 

Twelve long days, she lived in his sanctuary

          The nights were days full of summer love;

 

Warm evenings they danced by the light of the

          Cooling moon, she was their guide,

 

But when the day came in sight, they burned away;

           And the trip was heavier than ever,

 

Slowly as their bodies repeated to dust and ashes,

            At each step they took, through this winter beauty

 

Where her heart like a lump of ice, has been glued

            To his, when they touched the frozen fields;

 

Free from sorrow, he was in the spring ragweed

             The snow was melting, by his warmth,

                       Observing her fall of heart,

 

The dead brains branched, barren by their loss,

              The leaves where so discolored;

 

But his tender creature, his dear soul,

               Could accept her how she was;

 

And he trusted the stars above him;

             When he saw her, all enlightened, in the sky

He knew time was just a phase,

 

And gave her one last look, and so he left, skittish,

             Leaving his footprints in the snow.

 

 

He was her deer ...

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Enjoy another fantasy write.... xx

Reviews

[TheSweet]

There's a chapter in one of my favourite books that describes the idea of being careful when it comes to getting close to someone - it should be treated like a wild deer. If you make any bold moves or too much risk you'll only startle it off, so you need to be really still and let them get used to you being around and gentle let the trust build. It's based on being comfortable with someone and as someone, like myself, who is difficult to get to know properly - I relate to the concept 'deerly' (see what I did there?)

This poem reminded me of that idea and so it triggered some nice feelings - thanks for that. :) Another awesome write.

Ah you got this one so very well my friend, that was exactly the right (somhow anxious) feeling, I want to bring over in it. Wonderful you speak of this... it's truly an amazing review my friend. Thank you :)

* I wanted and * somehow.... sorry some typo's I got skittish by your beautiful words ;)

[TheSweet]

Not to worry, I suffer greatly from lazy touch-typing - mistakes all over the place. :)
I'm glad I was close to your intention though, I was wondering if I was just rambling about nothing. It was a really nice write though, good job!

You ramble always with deep philosophies my friend, ;) so it could only be "nothing" if it's "everything" the same time ;) Thank you dearly, I try to come by to you as well. :)

[Poetic Beauty]

To me this speaks of lost love. Someone who has traveled on the other side but the deer still watches over his beauty for she was perfect to him. Just my thoughts on this piece. The descriptions dance within the mind and create a world.

You have beautiful thoughts PB.... so good to see you again love! I will catch up on yours, oh I've missed you my friend xxx thank you so much!

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. I haven't written anything new since the last time I was on here. Been in a funk as of late. I have been feeling the itch again lately and thought I would pop on and get some inspiration. My new years goals are to get fit and write more. Oh and edit my book, growls at the thought, but alas it has to be done to send to publishers lol

Oh I love to hear this positivism from you... I bet you will get there dear one. lol yeah, it's a hard world, nine will read them, 1 will maybe pick you out... but there is so much love and hope for you, for you're brilliant always. Thank you so much, still on a kind of hiatus I am, I have no inspiration lately at all, due through some things in personal life that happened, but I hope to come with some new writings soon.... if I have a free moment, I try to catch up on your (even older stuff) words are never dusty, to me... they are so alive xx

[Poetic Beauty]

When the personal stuff isn't too close then write about it. many times the venting will help and many times it is also inspiration. You will find something to inspire you. Mine is simply laziness. The book is a paranormal romance. 100,000 words. My characters have been screaming to get it finished. lol I will get to more of your pieces tomorrow. It is getting late tonight. My brain is wanting to shut down. I like to be at my best when reading others work so I can focus and get the little things that I might otherwise miss.

So interesting, I want to buy your book... tell me all the details ok? when things roll. :) I shall support you. You're so right, great zen thought, go rest well... be only here when you have the energy, I do the same. Have sweet dreams my dear friend... until soon, very soon. Thank you for all. xx

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. It was nice to catch up for a few moments. Have a great night and hope you feel refreshed and alive in the mornings light.

Thank you... it's already morning here, 7:35 A.M. :) I was early ;) I will catch up on more rest soon... didn't slept well tonight, but catch up soon on more sleep. Till soon dear friend! Sleep well.

[Poetic Beauty]

It is almost 1 a.m. here. Time for sleep. Enjoy your day the best way you can.

[Frieda P]

So full of magical whimsy Elisa. A shift of nature's renewal, a glimpse of something really special here. Full of elegant imagery, you are the mistress of this fantasy genre my dear Sis. A breathtaking read. xo

Oh love, thank you so much cara, know I'm a bit lost, but I know the way, always, and it leads me soon to your writings Sis ;) he he... baci da parte mia, missing you so much!!! thanks for the support in the meantime! xxx

[Frieda P]

I feel you, you may be lost but your poetry is still brilliant mia dolce sorella, stay well xoxo

Muwah! that comforts my heart... Sei tu la mia dolce per sempre... ci vediamo presto! lo sai che non posso stare molto lungo senza di scrivere ;) he he... lol bacioni xx

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Winter brings such a wonderland of beauty around here and of course you are in the mist of it dear Elisa! Deer are one of my favorite creatures ....so gentle, but spry and enduring:) Beautiful!

Thank you for your sweet words my dear friend.... much love, and I will come by soon..... xxx

[Jack...]

My sweet friend, once again you have whisked me off to the enchanting land that lives and breathes somewhere in your mind. You have painted nature in the shade of love and tinted it with alluring tones of soft heartbeats and whispering sighs. This was simply beautiful and the serenity has lulled me into your dream world.

Oh Jack thank you so much for the lovely review. I can't thank you enough for all the reviews lately, I will make it up with you :)

[Jack...]

Take your time my sweet friend, your beautiful poetry keeps me company very nicely.

[Horizon K.]

Oh, I love this dreamy fantasy-story poem, Sis. I feel other-worldly, a piece of frozen sky, a fallen star, an arora, whoever she is, that can only last a short while, yet so magnificent that she captures hearts & inspires ethereal, everlasting love...

Thank you so much Sis, for this great review, you always seem to understand it so well.... love you! xx

[Scott Metro]

A lovely weaving.
The spirit is a wonderful muse.

Admiration Elisa.
Scott

Thank you so much my friend. :)

[Scott Metro]

:)
Scott.....

[Lydia Shutter]

"Time was just a phase"....indeed. A poignant tale you wove here, Elisa. How often people come into our lives and stay for just a short while....yet we remember them for so long. They leave an impact on us for whatever reason and truly even though they are gone, they leave their footprints...not in the snow, but in our hearts and psyches. Beautifully written. Your tender words are a pleasure to read, my friend. Knuffels, Lydi**

Thank you so much Lydi... heartsmiles, when you come by always.... be back soon I hope xx love to you knuffels... you always leave the greatest reviews!!!

[Troy Henson]

The impressions we leave in our walk are unique and our own. This is a beautiful write Elisa and one that captures our existence well.
'Choose our walk carefully our steps are numbered'

Regards
Troy

Thank you so much my dear friend.. xx I mail you soon!

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. I enjoyed the journey you took me with your words.
"Slowly as their bodies repeated to dust and ashes,
At each step they took, through this winter beauty"
So many amazing lines and places you took the reader. The above line was my favorite. Time can become meaningless when we are swimming in peace and a paradise. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Thank you dear friend, for this most wonderful review :) so appreciate you!