~ Magnetic Jam

~ Magnetic Jam

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~ Magnetic Jam, Elisa Laura, Psychedellic, Fantasy, Above, High, Skies, Love, Music, Colors, Touch, Beyond, Butterflies, Magnetic

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~ Magnetic Jam

 

 

Thirsty, I saw you,

In my REM sleep,

You seemed to move my eyes,

With your silent music;

 

Fiery notes, rapid gaps,

But deep spirited colors,

Overcome the void

With a warm feeling,

 

It brought unfathomable passion,

By silky thoughts,

Burning in my mind,

Singing in my deepest pain,

 

Howling like hungry wolves,

In a chilly night, where the moon

Smiles with her big pale face

 

“Dust we are, in gray matter;

She whispers….”

 

But colorful as a significant other

Who shall visit you,

With the love of music;

 

And plays the strings of your heart

As if he lost himself

Just right there…

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2014


Author's Note

Enjoy xx :)

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Gorgeous and supremely deep poetic work, Elisa (as always)! I've read this piece twice, and there's almost always something I just can't decipher. But perhaps it's better that way!

"It brought unfathomable passion/By silky thoughts," is possibly my favorite stanza out of all of them. But the story as a whole is supremely mystical and filled with magnificent beauty.

The message I've somewhat gathered from it is that someone (personified as the moon in your vision) was telling you of a "significant other" who would visit you, possibly in this dimension, communicating with "silent music," as you put it.

Of course, there is more depth to it than a simple review can explain, but I sense that you have many dimensions through which you travel, and these things are revealed to you in those dimensions. The poetry reflects that as best it can.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much Eric, for another great review, with depth, and layered observations. I so appre.. read more



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Yes, Yes, masterfully written.
Love the music you accompany your poetry with.

Trace

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend, I feel blessed with your words :)
love the last stanza...in sleep we dream and in sleep we meet up with those significant others we miss so much when they are afar...but always close in thought. always their memory is music.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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10 Years Ago

Thank you dear, I know what you mean, we both know this too well.


You remember what I told you, a few months before?


When reading such a thing as this, it's the mind's potential that overcomes me.....as indeed does yours.






Posted 10 Years Ago


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10 Years Ago

Yes, I remember... :) I hold your words close. Thank you for your presence here my friend.
The Representative

10 Years Ago

That's nice to hear. Also, if you recall my telling you, that time is power...


T.. read more

10 Years Ago

Time, is power... only time can tell. And patience.... thank you once again.
So hauntingly captivating, Elisa! Every line seemed to draw me in deeper and deeper... into a magical place where dreams, silence, passion and music are one. such an extraordinary poet you are, my friend. loved this.

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10 Years Ago

Thank you dear one, for your beautiful words, they mean much to me. :) hope all is well overthere -x.. read more
Oh holy sweetness that is so blissfully romantic… and that ending is a show stopping stunner.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so so much Dale... it was written for a very special person. :) I'm glad you enjoyed!
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

10 Years Ago

You are welcome… And it was written by a very special person.

10 Years Ago

Awww... you humble me my friend :) thank you! You are special Dale.
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Wow this is sooo beautiful. This made my heart sigh as I read the words you displayed. You are such a romantic.

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ron

10 Years Ago

You are a very good friend. Be safe and take care of what you need to. We have the world of time to .. read more

10 Years Ago

That's true... real friendship is timeless :) thank you once again. :)
ron

10 Years Ago

You know you can message me if you need to talk.
A highly descriptive and poignant piece that keeps ones interest peeked, well done, good read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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10 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear. :) glad it took your interest x
Thomas Fitzgerald

10 Years Ago

Your welcome.
Beautiful poem Elisa. I really liked the song too.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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10 Years Ago

Thank you Baby! :) always good to see you.
ahhhhh To be consumed by his music.... so passionate you can see the colors!
Now that is truly vibrant, Sis!!...

When something this magnetic stirs the heart it is undeniable, unfathomable, and untamable... Yet,
it is the one true Bliss!

Sheer magic! Fantastic write,Sis!~xoxo~:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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10 Years Ago

Thank you Sis, for your special words here, you get it always! Love you -x- :)
Dust we are and shall be, but your words are still pleasing. I heard the moon whispering through this, maybe in a dream she came to you, to sing songs in your head. I felt the wolves dancing through your words; they shake such creatures to the bone. You might need to explain the title to me, thanks
_K

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10 Years Ago

Thank you my friend, the title is a Jam Session, between two musical lovers.... great you enjoyed th.. read more
Kenaz

10 Years Ago

Ah, thank you

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