THE REFUGE IN THE DELUGE

The storm...
Which had blown the books pages wide open
Shed light
on the spine that lay spiritually broken
The edges,
once gilded and golden were beaten,
By words...
Far too savage...
To ever have greet them
She knelt down and touched them,
those tattered, wet pages,
and reeling..
she faltered
to stop the storm's rages
To cage it
and keep it
from raging again,
to make it accept her
for just who she is
But she knew in her heart that it wasn't enough
To quell the storm's anger
nor call the storm's bluff
So she curled in a ball and she covered her ears
and she waited
impatient
 but storms never hear..

Author's Note

This piece is a metaphor for a relationship. The storm represents the anger and rage of the male partner, and her deep desire for him to see his own behavior and listen to her, to validate she is even real, feeling like less than nothing standing in the downpour of the belittling rain..

Reviews

[Pete]

i like the analogy of the book at the beginning. really draws the reader in. "But she knew in her heart that it wasn't enough
To quell the storm's anger
nor call the storm's bluff" - favorite lines & turning point. punchy, thought-provoking ending. you are a fine writer.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very, very much for the compliments... I adore writing and am glad the emotion of the piece was apparent. That is the greater goal.. To impact the readers heart and paint a visual.

Thank you...
Misty

[Jacob Clifford]

Excellent metaphors! I fear something like this could only be written from first-hand experience. A toxic relationship very much is like a storm. Violent. Uncaring. Destructive. No matter how hard one tries, there's just no stopping it.

[Rafy T.Nym]

Distinctive piece of work! The formal use of metaphor in a complex situation should be considered charismatic. I must say that the title itself is a self-explanatory one. Well done!

[LostBoy]

Strong metaphors. Stand against the storm, lovely. Or bow to it in prayer.

ON THE SPINE THAT LAY SPIRITUALLY BROKEN

Great line!

[M. L. F.]

That is also my favorite line. I am glad the piece resonated with you. It is one of my favorite pieces... I am no poet though.. I mainly write fiction.. I just haven't finished and posted the greater body of my fiction work yet here.. aside from one short story.. Thank you for your time and kind review.

...Misty

[LostBoy]

You're welcome! Thanks for the insights. Awesome line. Just emphasizing. I'd LOVE to read your fiction!

[Island Hippy]

I enjoyed this, a poetic and fitting metaphor. I stayed in a relationship that was exactly this a constant storm without ears or eyes, just utter oblivion. It can break your spirit. I loved how you laid it all down. Izzy.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much for the kind review. I really feel happy to hear that you got the theme of this piece on a deeper level! I really understand the way it feels and always only wish to recreate that emotion vividly for the reader...

Thank you..
Misty

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think the real storm is what rages inside oneself.. Making it impossible to contain yourself within.. To some of us it's hard to accept what we are let alone make someone else believe..
I liked reading this.. This was deep!

[M. L. F.]

As always.. I thank you YumnaKay.. another detailed review. The point of my pieces are not lost on you... thank you very much.. your time is always appreciated.. ;)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome, Misty! It's always a pleasure reading your work mainly because it makes my clogged mind open up a bit 😉😂

[M. L. F.]

Lol! Glad to be the drain out for your brain then.... The honor.. is Mine! ;)

[M. L. F.]

Draino" autocorrect is horrendous with a mind of it's own :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha yeah 😂

[Robert Parlange]

Very visual. I like the metaphor of a storm for an abusive relationship. Powerful.
Or did I misinterpret this. Not sure, I have a caffeine buzz going on here.

[M. L. F.]

Aye Maestro... it's def the caffeine. ;) lol. No it is not about abuse, but about a communication dilemna, that makes her go child mode and he go frustrated, not knowing what to do. Very keen of you though. Your interpretation was very good. As usual.