THROUGH THE FIRE

Through the fire, through the flames
you emerged like a swan
Stolen grace,
but the pain you would use, your reform
Though we watched as you flailed,
Now we watch as you dawn
Shedding layers
Shedding pain
See the light through the storm
Shake the earth
Thunder's quake
Of the Fire you were born
Now you rise
as we pray
Rise anew
Precious swan
Use that Fire deep inside
Burn it's way through the dawn
It's for YOU, not for THEM
Take a hold, YOUR REFORM
So one day, you shall stand
against the wind
against the storm
Here today
Past is gone
Precious Swan

© 2017 M. L. F.

Author's Note

For someone much tougher than she thinks.... Congratulations on making it through the fire... ;)

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Wow! A very, very graceful and powerful write! This has a very wonderful flow and a delicate softness to it, a gentle urging to this swan to pass through its own baptism of fire, shed its feathers and rise like a phoenix, reborn, and conquer all that the world can throw its way. Both inspiring and beautiful at the same time, this poem is a must read for those of us who do not want to leave the comforting shelter of their existence. Even if that existence is one of fear and fake comforts. An exceptional piece of writing, Misty. One to be very proud of. Very well done! Wow! A very, very graceful and powerful write! This has a very wonderful flow and a delicate softness to it, a gentle urging to this swan to pass through its own baptism of fire, shed its feathers and rise like a phoenix, reborn, and conquer all that the world can throw its way. Both inspiring and beautiful at the same time, this poem is a must read for those of us who do not want to leave the comforting shelter of their existence. Even if that existence is one of fear and fake comforts. An exceptional piece of writing, Misty. One to be very proud of. Very well done! Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Thanks Doodley.. Very kind words. Glad you appreciated the momentum in this piece. It means a lot, so it's a wonderful piece to hear gets through... :)

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Ruth

Beautiful, the use of fire so poignant and meaningful, to rise and be cleansed, to reshape and kick the ashes to the curb, to be reborn and be the self, inspiring :) Beautiful, the use of fire so poignant and meaningful, to rise and be cleansed, to reshape and kick the ashes to the curb, to be reborn and be the self, inspiring :) Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

Wow. This was a powerful poem ... perhaps the most poignant inspirational poem I've read on this site. I liked your choices in phrasing and syntax ... the short phrases conjured up nice images in my mind without sounding choppy or mundane. I like how you utilize word economy in that some lines allow the reader to connect the dots without sounding incomplete or fragmented. I also enjoyed the imagery related to the swan as well as the swan analogy as a whole. I hope this "someone much tougher than she thinks" can emerge like the swan in this poem. - William Liston Wow. This was a powerful poem ... perhaps the most poignant inspirational poem I've read on this site. I liked your choices in phrasing and syntax ... the short phrases conjured up nice images in my mind without sounding choppy or mundane. I like how you utilize word economy in that some lines allow the reader to connect the dots without sounding incomplete or fragmented. I also enjoyed the imagery related to the swan as well as the swan analogy as a whole. I hope this "someone much tougher than she thinks" can emerge like the swan in this poem. - William Liston Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago What a compliment William! Thank you so much for saying that. I wrote it for a person who has been through the flames, a person who seemed at first to be quite ablaze...but now is coming out like a warrior.. swinging, just like I taught her. Thank you so much for the elaborate critique William... ...Misty

Diamond

Every woman who fought or is fighting the claws of fate can reckon with this writing. I loved the image of swan very much. Power packed gem. Every woman who fought or is fighting the claws of fate can reckon with this writing. I loved the image of swan very much. Power packed gem. Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Thank you very much. I hope to inspire~ poetry should be powerful... I aim for this ... even when the feeling is love... may it be powerful love. Go hard or go home seems to be a recurrent theme for me.. ;) Thanks again! ..Misty

Mikael Malmberg

Wow! I couldn't help but to imagine a power ballad around these lyrics. Powerful words. Wow! I couldn't help but to imagine a power ballad around these lyrics. Powerful words. Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago When I was small I started writing music first. I love the idea of this being a power ballad. Thank you for the lovely compliments. I wrote them as an anthem for someone in particular. She is a warrior. May she always know that, and may anyone and everyone who reads this and needs it know these words apply to them also... ..Misty

Deco

The task of living requires perseverance by the changes that it brings...as a general preposition in a way. Your poem speaks to that sentiment. Good work here. The task of living requires perseverance by the changes that it brings...as a general preposition in a way. Your poem speaks to that sentiment. Good work here. Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Thank you very much. I agree about perseverance. Glad the poem spoke to this anthem. ..Misty

Manu

This one is full of optimism like a phoenix is rising from the ashes ! A very powerful and inspiring write, Misty :-) When you rise after fighting hard you become unbeatable...more stronger than ever. I love the way you presented this thought. Keep it up ! This one is full of optimism like a phoenix is rising from the ashes ! A very powerful and inspiring write, Misty :-) When you rise after fighting hard you become unbeatable...more stronger than ever. I love the way you presented this thought. Keep it up ! Rating /100 M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Thank you very much. Glad to see the point was well understood. Thank you for reading. ..Misty

OhSnapShley

This is a beautiful poem! I get the feeling that anything is possible through this piece. Thank you for sharing your talent with us :) -OhSnap This is a beautiful poem! I get the feeling that anything is possible through this piece. Thank you for sharing your talent with us :) -OhSnap Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago I am so happy to hear it was an inspiration. To move the reader is high up on my list, so it was a compliment indeed. Thank you.. ..Misty

Dr. YumnaKay

There are people who think they are strong, they appear to be tough because they don't want anyone to know how vulnerable they are in actual.. In a way it's good but sometimes it's just better to let someone in.. Your poem gives hope and strength to the reader that all is not yet lost.. I felt as if this was written for me! Deeply touched me.. And for the first time I had to think about what should I write in a review... Good work, Misty! There are people who think they are strong, they appear to be tough because they don't want anyone to know how vulnerable they are in actual.. In a way it's good but sometimes it's just better to let someone in.. Your poem gives hope and strength to the reader that all is not yet lost.. I felt as if this was written for me! Deeply touched me.. And for the first time I had to think about what should I write in a review... Good work, Misty! Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Thank you very much. I am glad that you liked the piece. I hope to give strength to women and people downtrodden in general... ..Thank you for the read and the review.. ..Misty Dr. YumnaKay 7 Years Ago That you did! And you are welcome 😊

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What a stunning testament to pushing on....we are so much stronger than we even know. Your words give wings to the words 'the best is yet to come' I really love this Misty, your words feel like a warm embrace gently earnest and encouraging, this review feels rather clumsy I'm sorry :) Starz x What a stunning testament to pushing on....we are so much stronger than we even know. Your words give wings to the words 'the best is yet to come' I really love this Misty, your words feel like a warm embrace gently earnest and encouraging, this review feels rather clumsy I'm sorry :) Starz x Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive. M. L. F. 7 Years Ago Not at all Starz... I think your words were great. I appreciate so much when people truly get the depths of a piece. It means the emotion is coming through. The fire. Thank you, as always your opinion is highly valued Starz.. :) ...Misty

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[.]

Wow! A very, very graceful and powerful write!

This has a very wonderful flow and a delicate softness to it, a gentle urging to this swan to pass through its own baptism of fire, shed its feathers and rise like a phoenix, reborn, and conquer all that the world can throw its way.

Both inspiring and beautiful at the same time, this poem is a must read for those of us who do not want to leave the comforting shelter of their existence. Even if that existence is one of fear and fake comforts.

An exceptional piece of writing, Misty. One to be very proud of. Very well done!

[M. L. F.]

Thanks Doodley.. Very kind words. Glad you appreciated the momentum in this piece. It means a lot, so it's a wonderful piece to hear gets through... :)

[Ruth]

Beautiful, the use of fire so poignant and meaningful, to rise and be cleansed, to reshape and kick the ashes to the curb, to be reborn and be the self, inspiring :)

[William Liston]

Wow. This was a powerful poem ... perhaps the most poignant inspirational poem I've read on this site.

I liked your choices in phrasing and syntax ... the short phrases conjured up nice images in my mind without sounding choppy or mundane. I like how you utilize word economy in that some lines allow the reader to connect the dots without sounding incomplete or fragmented. I also enjoyed the imagery related to the swan as well as the swan analogy as a whole. I hope this "someone much tougher than she thinks" can emerge like the swan in this poem.

- William Liston

[M. L. F.]

What a compliment William! Thank you so much for saying that. I wrote it for a person who has been through the flames, a person who seemed at first to be quite ablaze...but now is coming out like a warrior.. swinging, just like I taught her. Thank you so much for the elaborate critique William...
...Misty

[Diamond]

Every woman who fought or is fighting the claws of fate can reckon with this writing. I loved the image of swan very much. Power packed gem.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much. I hope to inspire~ poetry should be powerful... I aim for this ... even when the feeling is love... may it be powerful love. Go hard or go home seems to be a recurrent theme for me.. ;) Thanks again!
..Misty

[Mikael Malmberg]

Wow! I couldn't help but to imagine a power ballad around these lyrics. Powerful words.

[M. L. F.]

When I was small I started writing music first. I love the idea of this being a power ballad. Thank you for the lovely compliments. I wrote them as an anthem for someone in particular. She is a warrior. May she always know that, and may anyone and everyone who reads this and needs it know these words apply to them also...
..Misty

[Deco]

The task of living requires perseverance by the changes that it brings...as a general preposition in a way. Your poem speaks to that sentiment. Good work here.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much. I agree about perseverance. Glad the poem spoke to this anthem.
..Misty

[Manu]

This one is full of optimism like a phoenix is rising from the ashes !
A very powerful and inspiring write, Misty :-)
When you rise after fighting hard you become unbeatable...more stronger than ever.
I love the way you presented this thought.
Keep it up !

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much. Glad to see the point was well understood. Thank you for reading.
..Misty

[OhSnapShley]

This is a beautiful poem! I get the feeling that anything is possible through this piece. Thank you for sharing your talent with us :)

-OhSnap

[M. L. F.]

I am so happy to hear it was an inspiration. To move the reader is high up on my list, so it was a compliment indeed. Thank you..
..Misty

[Dr. YumnaKay]

There are people who think they are strong, they appear to be tough because they don't want anyone to know how vulnerable they are in actual.. In a way it's good but sometimes it's just better to let someone in.. Your poem gives hope and strength to the reader that all is not yet lost.. I felt as if this was written for me! Deeply touched me.. And for the first time I had to think about what should I write in a review... Good work, Misty!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much. I am glad that you liked the piece. I hope to give strength to women and people downtrodden in general... ..Thank you for the read and the review..
..Misty

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That you did! And you are welcome 😊

[...]

What a stunning testament to pushing on....we are so much stronger than we even know. Your words give wings to the words 'the best is yet to come' I really love this Misty, your words feel like a warm embrace gently earnest and encouraging, this review feels rather clumsy I'm sorry :) Starz x

[M. L. F.]

Not at all Starz... I think your words were great. I appreciate so much when people truly get the depths of a piece. It means the emotion is coming through. The fire. Thank you, as always your opinion is highly valued Starz..
:)
...Misty