Rainy Evening Blues

She stands on the boulevard of broken dreams
    like a blues song waiting to be written
while the others are prancing
                 dancing
                                   singing in the rain
she remains

between memories and the unbearable lightness of being
she hangs her head
    losing the crying game
                          again
and clings to the lamp post by the bus stop
as if it can somehow anchor her to the lost reality of
the concrete jungle

            Third story walk up tenement rear window
            leaning out
                a boy and his dog
            surveying the sidewalk soldiers
            who pass her by, stepping sideways
            so as not to disturb this pale dragonfly of a woman,
            this sideshow attraction of dejection
            in a carnival of lost souls

    A sound of thunder
    chain lightning  illuminating the streets with flickering blue
    and in that moment he feels the crush
                            the pangs of first love
    for this outcast lady of a thousand sorrows twice his age

        He dreams of standing on tiptoes
        separating tears from rain with his hand
        whispering
                I'll save you
                I'll love you
                I'll be the one
                who never leaves you
                            like this

And then
a wave of humanity washes over the street
    like orphans of the storm in search of homes and warmth and refuge
fifty, sixty or more obscuring all from view
When they part
the lady vanishes
and he feels his heart
break for the very first time . . . .

Reviews

[Tatiana]

Wow!!!...That is incredible I'm sure if I quite understood it, it seems as if he lost someone he loved, a woman who was very lost. Lost in the sense of her life, himself included, What I understood I loved, the parts about the people around them is like when one walks down the street an is completely sad, noticing that the world is the same way, in any case I loved it, your wife is right you should keep writing!!

[emz]

I like the highlighted movies... brilliantly written.. clearly very accomplished... i like your style my man xx

[FuMiko]

You should be proud of this! An amazing job, you can imagine what you're describing.
If a picture is worth a thousand words, this is worth more!

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

hi Todd, this one is so dreamy and sort of filled with a delusion of saving and loving the one thing that is so near, and fragile yet so far away and obscure. It makes one feel the ache of such, and gets one involved in it so intuitively,

great great work! ----mishy, best poem I've ever read!

[RogueVamp]

Thanks for your review so I rtf[returned the favor]. This for some reasn made me cry and I dont know why. It was...beautiful......!=]

[Rambling Prose]

This is a truly a magnificent Movie Madness piece; it reads much like a prologue of a romance novel. I love the format you chose!

~'Tis indeed an excellent piece of writing! Best of luck in the contest~